HOMEWORK 3
학생이 쓴 원문
There are serious traffic jam in cities of dense population in every morning.
So commuting is not only wasteful but also tiring.
Also, It could be dangerous to take public transports in a Pandemic situation like these days.
On the other hand, working at home could be inefficient.
Because there are no coworkers who watch and monitor you.
강사 첨삭
Good afternoon, [이름]!
Thank you so much for this composition. I\'ve read it well.
I agree with your opinion. Some people tend to slack off when the boss isn\'t around. ^_^
We can discuss this in class if you want to. See you then!
__T. Mayleen :)
There are serious traffic jam in cities of dense population in every morning.
>>> Traffic jam in cities with dense population is serious every morning.
So commuting is not only wasteful but also tiring.
So commuting is not only wasteful but also tiring.
>>> Thus, commuting is not only time consuming but also tiring.
Also, It could be dangerous to take public transports in a Pandemic situation like these days.
Also, It could be dangerous to take public transports in a Pandemic situation like these days.
>>> Also, it could be dangerous to take public transport now that there\'s a pandemic.
On the other hand, working at home could be inefficient.
On the other hand, working at home could be inefficient.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: On the other hand, working at home could lead to inefficiency.
Because there are no coworkers who watch and monitor you.
Because there are no coworkers who watch and monitor you.
>>> It\'s because there\'s no one to watch and monitor you.
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