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2013-05-06 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

학생이 쓴 원문

1.What2.When3.Where4.What5.Why6.When7.When8.How9.What10.Where So I have a plan and it is to have a pilot certificate. It is because I want to guide my team comfortably.I will ride an airplane at the height of the sky and then I will shout "We will go to the forest!" So my team will have a feeling of marale. wow! What an imagination I feel my heart beats fast.And I want to go to the "Great Barrier Reef".The Great Barrier reef is in Cairns.. I want to observe many corals and fishes at the Great Barrier Reef. Now, I breed salt water fishes.When I started to breed salt water fishes,I didn't know anything about their life,so a lot of my fishes died.But now my fishes and corals are healthy.Biologist is a wonderful job.It is because the job can do all of the activities.

강사 첨삭

Hi there my dear TOM^^ HAPPY MONDAY!! A new week for us to be together again.  I am so happy that you did a great job with your homework as well as with your essay.  Tonight,we are going to practice it and afterwards we will talk about it in class. How was your weekend?  I am looking forward to hear beautiful stories from you. See you! Take Care!Please go over the correction I gave you for your improvement. Teacher Nina Here are my corrections for you: 1.What >> Correct! 2.When >> Correct! 3.Where >> Why 4.What >> Correct! 5.Why >> Wjere 6.When >> How 7.When >> Correct! 8.How >> Where 9.What >> Correct! 10.Where>> HowSo I have a plan and it is to have a pilot certificate. >> Correct!It is because I want to guide my team comfortably. >> Correct! OR >> It is because I want to guide my team in a comfortable manner. I will ride an airplane at the height of the sky and then I will shout \"We will go to the forest!\" >> Correct! So my team will have a feeling of marale. >> So my team will have a feeling of morale. wow! What an imagination I feel my heart beats fast.And I want to go to the \"Great Barrier Reef\". >> Wow! What an imagination. I want to go to the \"Great Barrier Reef\". The Great Barrier reef is in Cairns.. I want to observe many corals and fishes at the Great Barrier Reef. >> It is located in Cairns, Australia. I want to observe a lot of corals and fishes at the Great Barrier Reef.Now, I breed salt water fishes. >> Correct! When I started to breed salt water fishes,I didn\'t know anything about their life,so a lot of my fishes died. >> Correct! But now my fishes and corals are healthy. >> Correct! Biologist is a wonderful job.It is because the job can do all of the activities. >> Correct!

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