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2013-05-07 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Nowadays, many Koreans are breeding pets like dogs and cats and sometimes we can even see people who are breeding reptiles like crocodiles and snakes. I recommend those people that someone must be feel horrible so, if you live in apartment don't breed reptiles. I think breeding pets is very good people. They can learn how to love pets, how to take care about those. It will affected by around your people. And you can also have jobs related to take care animals and people. You will be more humble and nice for poor. Some people are abusing pets and it's illegal in Korea. Those people think pets can't speak and it doesn't matter at all. But, I reaffirmed that it's illegal that means you can go to jail if you abused to pets. Pets have also life and they have to repect their life even they're not person. Love pets, people and nature.

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Hi there!!! ^^ That was an amazing composition! I hope you keep on writing! Keep up the great job! Have a great evening ahead. Teacher Jeny ^_^   Nowadays, many Koreans are breeding pets like dogs and cats and sometimes we can even see people who are breeding reptiles like crocodiles and snakes. >> CORRECT! I recommend those people that someone must be feel horrible so, if you live in apartment don\'t breed reptiles. >> I recommend those people who feel horrible not to breed reptiles. I think breeding pets is very good people. >> I think breeding pets is a good characteristic. They can learn how to love pets, how to take care about those. >> They can learn how to love and take good care of pets. It will affected by around your people. >> It can be affected by people around. And you can also have jobs related to take care animals and people. >> And you can also have a job related to taking good care of animals and people. You will be more humble and nice for poor. >> You will be more humble and helpful. Some people are abusing pets and it\'s illegal in Korea. >> CORRECT! Those people think pets can\'t speak and it doesn\'t matter at all. >> CORRECT! But, I reaffirmed that it\'s illegal that means you can go to jail if you abused to pets. >> But I reaffirmed that it\'s illegal which means you can go to jail if you abuse some animals. Pets have also life and they have to repect their life even they\'re not person. >> Pets have also life and they have to be respected even though they\'re not a human being. Love pets, people and nature. >> CORRECT!

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