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학생이 쓴 원문
Yes, I agree that Scientific and technological advances have a good influence. We have many Scientific and technological equipment so that make us more comfortable and kill time.
But they sometimes affect us and lead to making a long distance from person to person. Because we have more much time playing a game with technological facilities. So it makes relation far.
And they also lead to enviromental destruction. For example, vehicle is easy to go wherever, but it makes a lot of air pollution. And it makes our healthy bad.
강사 첨삭
Hello there^^
Thanks for your time in doing this good composition.
You were expressive in sharing your thoughts.
I agree with you that it gives us good things but in the other way arround
it also gives us problems. We should learn how to use the wisely and correctly.
Remeber this, \"Everything that is too much could become a poison that that could kill a person\". ^^.
Teacher Kathrine
Yes, I agree that Scientific and technological advances have a good influence.
>> Yes, I agree that scientific and technological advance have good influences.
>>Or better: Yes, I agree that scientific and technological advance have good advantages.
We have many Scientific and technological equipment so that make us more comfortable and kill time.
>>We have may scientifis and technological equipment so they make our life more comfortable and it saves our time.But they sometimes affect us and lead to making a long distance from person to person.
>>But it affects our relationship with other people.
Because we have more much time playing a game with technological facilities.
>>Because we have more time playing with games rather spending time talking or sharind things with others.
So it makes relation far.>>This could create a gap in relationships.And they also lead to enviromental destruction.
>>Technological advances also contiribute to our environmental destruction.
For example, vehicle is easy to go wherever, but it makes a lot of air pollution. >>For example, we use vehicles to go to other places but it could make a lot of air pollution.
And it makes our healthy bad.
>>This could affect our health.
>> OR: This could make our health bad.
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