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I'm not sure what is better but, I prefer to live in countryside. I have lived in Seoul for 30 years but, I want to live quiet place like countryside. Seoul is very complicated because Korea's citizens of 1/4 population live in here. Nature is too much distroyed and poluted by people and it caused by me to want to move other cities. I want to live around sea or mountains that can make my family more health and fresh. That is less polute than cities and more leisurely. That will be nice.
강사 첨삭
Hello again^^
Wow!I knew that there were many people in Seoul but I didn\'t expect that 1/4 of your country\'s population is residing there!
That means that there are less people in the countryside.
You\'re right!
There are advantages in living in the countryside.
It\'s really great for the health and it\'s really refreshing.
I\'ll see you tomorrow!
Good night!
T.JENY
I\'m not sure what is better but, I prefer to live in countryside.
>>>I\'m not sure what is better, but I prefer to live in the countryside.
I have lived in Seoul for 30 years but, I want to live quiet place like countryside.
>>>I have lived in Seoul for 30 years, but I want to live in a quiet place like the countryside.
Seoul is very complicated because Korea\'s citizens of 1/4 population live in here.
>>>Seoul is very complicated because 1/4 of Korean citizens live in there.
Nature is too much distroyed and poluted by people and it caused by me to want to move other cities.
>>>Nature is too destroyed and polluted by people, and it caused me to want to move to other cities.
I want to live around sea or mountains that can make my family more health and fresh.
>>>Correct!
>>>Or: I want to live around the sea or mountains because that can make my family more healthy and refreshed.
That is less polute than cities and more leisurely.
>>>That is less polluted than cities, and more leisurely.
That will be nice.
>>>Correct!
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