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I absolutely believe that the right thing is different rates of tax depending on salary. If not, how good for riches who normally consist of 1~2% of population. I'm sure it's unfair and most of cuntries take action different rates of taxes on salary including Korea. More income, more pay taxes.
Some Americans who are riches are repected by citizens of all over the world because of donation. They try to clearly pay taxes and donate their fortune that's main reason they are applaud by citizens. But, it's few percentage. Especially, I haven't found those people in Korea until now and that's ashamed for me. If I were a rich, I should try to take action noblesse oblige and I hope riches must have to do it.
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Hello [이름],
Thank you for your composition. It was nice of you to explain your opinion.
I think it better to have a simple life.
We need to be satisfied with our lives and let God handle it.
T. Jeny
I absolutely believe that the right thing is different rates of tax depending on salary.
>>I absolutely believe that the right thing about the different rates of taxes depend on the salary.
If not, how good for riches who normally consist of 1~2% of population.
>>If not, it is beneficial for the rich people, who normally consist of 1-2% of the population.
I\'m sure it\'s unfair and most of cuntries take action different rates of taxes on salary including Korea.
>>I\'m sure if it is unfair because most countries take different actions about salary taxes including Korea.
More income, more pay taxes.
>>More income, pay more taxes.
Some Americans who are riches are repected by citizens of all over the world because of donation.
>>Some Americans who are rich are respected by the citizens all over the world because of donations.
They try to clearly pay taxes and donate their fortune that\'s main reason they are applaud by citizens.
>>They try to clearly pay taxes and donate their fortune, that\'s the main reason why they are applauded by the citizens.
But, it\'s few percentage.
>>But they are only a few.
Especially, I haven\'t found those people in Korea until now and that\'s ashamed for me.
>> Especially, I haven\'t seen those people in Korea until now and that\'s shameful for me.
If I were a rich, I should try to take action noblesse oblige and I hope riches must have to do it.
>> If I were rich, I should try to take action noblesse oblige and I hope rich people must also do it.
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