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I agree with your opinion because Korea has also this problem and that's the main reason why so many people have debt. If we do not have enough money, we must spend properly in cash but, some people want to get more goods beyond their cash like super-car or expensive house etc. To get those products, we should hard work or try to effort how can make lots of money. I recommend people that avoid borrow money from bank. One of the destrying your life is overspending.
I think success is to be expert in your industry. Malcom Gladwell, author of Focus 10,000 hours, insists on that people try to effort 10,000 hours at least to be an expert. It's really enormous time. We have to realize money and material goods is not important.
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Hi there!
Thank you for sending this essay.
I agree that people should live within their means and try to save as much as they could.
Rest now and see you in class.
Sincerely,
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I agree with your opinion because Korea has also this problem and that\'s the main reason why so many people have debt.
>>I agree with your opinion because Korea also has that problem and that\'s why so many people have debts.
If we do not have enough money, we must spend properly in cash but, some people want to get more goods beyond their cash like super-car or expensive house etc.
>>If we do not have much money, we must properly spend but some people spend beyond their *means. (*I am referring to assets, resources especially money like in the expression \"living within your means\")
To get those products, we should hard work or try to effort how can make lots of money.
>>To get the products we wanted, we should work hard and try to save more money.
I recommend people that avoid borrow money from bank.
>>I recommend avoiding borrowing money from the bank.
One of the destrying your life is overspending.>>Overspending can destroy your life.
I think success is to be expert in your industry.
>>I think success can be achieved in being an expert in your field.
Malcom Gladwell, author of Focus 10,000 hours, insists on that people try to effort 10,000 hours at least to be an expert.
>>Malcolm Gladwell, the author of Focus 10,000 hours insists that peopl should spend 10,000 hours at least to be an expert in a certain field.
It\'s really enormous time.
>>It\'s really a large amount of time.
We have to realize money and material goods is not important.
>>We have to realize that money and material goods are not important.
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