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학생이 쓴 원문
I agree that There should be rules of behavior for children. But it doesn't need to be strict. Because they have already had their own thingking and rules. Also, they have already Known what behavior is proper. So, if their parents make rules for children's regulations and teach them according to rules, children will understand and follow enough.
Also, strict rules can make children contrary. There should be praise and regulation. If not, though they know that something shouldn't be done, they do that for defiance. Like as horse need both carrots and whip, children also need both rules and praise for their better future.
강사 첨삭
Hi there,
Yes, there should be rules of behavior for children and it doesn\'t need to be strict.
Children if guided properly will listen to their elders. You\'ve made an excellent composition.
Every sentence is correct. Just be careful not to capitalize words if placed in the middle
of a sentence unless it is a proper noun. See you in class. Take care.(^^)
~T. Kathrine~
I agree that There should be rules of behavior for children.
>> CORRECT
>> I agree that there should be rules of behavior for children.
But it doesn\'t need to be strict.
>> CORRECT
Because they have already had their own thingking and rules.
>> Because they already have their own thinking and their own rules.
Also, they have already Known what behavior is proper.
>> Also, they already know what behavior is proper.
So, if their parents make rules for children\'s regulations and teach them according to rules, children will understand and follow enough.
>> So, if parents make rules and regulations for their children and teach them according to rules and regulations, the children will understand and follow them.Also, strict rules can make children contrary.
>> Also, strict rules can make children hostile.
There should be praise and regulation. If not, though they know that something shouldn\'t be done, they do that for defiance.
>> CORRECT
>> Because if there\'s none, then they would still do something they know which shouldn\'t be done, as an act of defiance.
Like as horse need both carrots and whip, children also need both rules and praise for their better future.
>> Like that of a horse, as it needs both carrots and whip to survive, so does children. They need both rules and praise for their future to be better.
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