homework
학생이 쓴 원문
To having responsibility is important when we're in everywhere. We're a member of family, school, work place and country so, we should have reponsible our behaviors in each places. When we're student, most of our bad behaviors can be forgive because of immature. They can give us one more chance for our future but, over 20 ages, we should be careful of our behaviors than students. We can go to prison from our acts.
Especially, army strongly requests soldier's responsibility. Soldier's mission is significant because it's directly connect to citizen's life. They must have responsibility of citizen's safe.
강사 첨삭
Good evening^^
You\'re right!We should be responsible with our actions.
We should face the consequences of our misbehaviors.
It\'s tough to have big responsibilities, but that\'s what makes life.
We have to be strong enough for our responsibilities.
Anyway, enjoy your evening.
I\'ll see you first thing tomorrow morning.
T.JENNY
To having responsibility is important when we\'re in everywhere.
>>>Having responsibility is important where ever we are.
>>>Or: Being responsible is important where ever we are.
We\'re a member of family, school, work place and country so, we should have reponsible our behaviors in each places.
>>>We\'re a member of a family, a school, a work place and a country; so we should be responsible with our behaviors in each of these places.
When we\'re student, most of our bad behaviors can be forgive because of immature.
>>>When we\'re a student, most of our bad behaviors can be forgiven because of our immaturity.
They can give us one more chance for our future but, over 20 ages, we should be careful of our behaviors than students.
>>>They can give us another chance for our future, but once we\'re over 20 years of age, we should be careful with our behaviors.
We can go to prison from our acts.
>>>Correct!
>>>Or: We can go to prison because of our actions. Especially, army strongly requests soldier\'s responsibility.
>>>Did you mean: Most especially in the army; they strongly requests for soldiers to be responsible.
Soldier\'s mission is significant because it\'s directly connect to citizen\'s life.
>>>A soldiers mission is significant because it\'s directly connected to the citizen\'s life.
They must have responsibility of citizen\'s safe.
>>>They have the responsibility to ensure the citizens safety.
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