Homework#32
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi,teacher! Umm.. I forgot doing homework. I thought we don\'t have a class today because today is a holiday.
Anyway here are my homework.
HW#32What\'s your opinion on countries with nuclear weapons and those who want weapons?
I think Nuclear weapons are necessary evil. The best way to preserve peace is that all of countries agree with non-nuclear agreement.
But, a few of countries don\'t agree that agreement, and they have nuclear. So, My thought is that if their countries want to be powerful, they have to make nuclear. I mean that it should be to protect its own people, not to use it to war. Sadly, there are some many bully countries. To protect the country from them, I think we have to have nuclear.
강사 첨삭
Hi Jonathan!
Here are the corrections.
I think Nuclear weapons are necessary evil. The best way to preserve peace is that all of countries agree with non-nuclear agreement.
>>I think nuclear weapons are unnecessarily evil. The best way to preserve peace is that all of countries should agree with non-nuclear agreement.
But, a few of countries don\'t agree that agreement, and they have nuclear. So, My thought is that if their countries want to be powerful, they have to make nuclear.
>>But, a few of the countries don\'t agree on that agreement, and they have nuclear weapons. So, my thought is that if countries want to be powerful, they have to make nuclear weapons.
I mean that it should be to protect its own people, not to use it to war. Sadly, there are some many bully countries. To protect the country from them, I think we have to have nuclear.
>>I mean that it should protect its own people, not to use it to wars. Sadly, there are many bully countries. To protect our country from them, I think we have to have nuclear weapons.
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