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2013-06-26 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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I agree that the traditional male role will change in the last 20 years. Inhave two reasons for that. First, it has already been changing these days. Since the number of males decrease, the rights of famales big increasingly. Many of females in the class aren't weird thing these days. Females can shout their opinion and insist them powerfully. Second, since the female president was elected in Korea, the proud of female has been increasing. the Ministry of Gender Equality can also assert their side and support the right of females. So, I think there is a possibility that male and female will change their roles.

강사 첨삭

Hello Ms. [Name]! Good job for today:)) Keep up the good work. I can see the way you compare and contrast your answers here.  Enhance that skill in writing. See you in class tomorrow! Have a great day! ^^ T. Kathrine. :)   I agree that the traditional male role will change in the last 20 years. >> I agree that the traditional male role has been  chnaging for the last 20 years. Inhave two reasons for that. >> I have two reasons for that. First, it has already been changing these days. >> CORRECT Since the number of males decrease, the rights of famales big increasingly. >> Since the number of male is decreasing, the rights of females is increasingly big. Many of females in the class aren\'t weird thing these days. >> Many women in the class are not doing weird things these days.  Females can shout their opinion and insist them powerfully. >> CORRECTSecond, since the female president was elected in Korea, the proud of female has been increasing. >> Second, since a female president was elected in Korea, the proud females have been increasing.  the Ministry of Gender Equality can also assert their side and support the right of females. >> CORRECT (**capitalization) So, I think there is a possibility that male and female will change their roles. >> CORRECT

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