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2013-06-27 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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I agree that modern technology make life more convenient. I have two reasons for that. First, the modern technology will help and work instead of us. So. it would make us more comfortable to live. Some works which is hard to do order to robots which is the best thing in modern technology society. Second, we already accustomed to do something with them. For example, we use cell phones when we want to talk to whom lives in far away. And, we also use computer when we have to search something, do homework and give some messages. So, technology doesn't simple thing any more in our society. And, technology should be improved as much as people want more innovative technology. Naturally, when a scientific technician develop it, they should always think the most important thing is using them easily and simply.

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  Hi there Ms. [Name] :)) Thanks for the idea that you have shared today. Of course, technology makes our lives more convenient and comfortable. But that does not mean that we only depend everything to the new technology. Well, thanks again for today and I\'ll see you next meeting! Thank you! :o) Always, T. Kathrine ^^   I agree that modern technology make life more convenient. >> CORRECT I have two reasons for that. >> CORRECTFirst, the modern technology will help and work instead of us. >> First, the modern technology will help us at work instead. So. it would make us more comfortable to live. >> CORRECT Some works which is hard to do order to robots which is the best thing in modern technology society. >> Some works which are hard can be ordered to the robots which is the best thing in the modern technology. Second, we already accustomed to do something with them. >> Second, we are already accustomed doing something with them. For example, we use cell phones when we want to talk to whom lives in far away. >> For example, we use cellphone when we want to talk to a person who is lives far away. And, we also use computer when we have to search something, do homework and give some messages. >> And, we also use the computer when we have to search something, do some homeworks and send some messages. So, technology doesn\'t simple thing any more in our society. >> So technology does not anymore only do simple things in our society. And, technology should be improved as much as people want more innovative technology. >> CORRECT Naturally, when a scientific technician develop it, they should always think the most important thing is using them easily and simply. >> Naturally, when a scientist/technician develops it, they should always think that the most important thing is to use them simply and easily.

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