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Nowdays, I enjoy listening pop songs, because pop song is more emotional and not to fed up with them. Espeacailly, I like the fray and onerepublic which are Ameracan musicain. Their songs are so nice and have beautiful lyrics which make me to be sympathized with them. And thier melody is also really beautiful, whenever, I listen to their music,I'm so happy and never forget to their songs. Yesterday, exactly nowdays, I felt so bad and depressed due to many reasons. I need something which can make me recover. I expect this, while I am listening to music.Anyway, I hope, beautiful songs will be made continually.
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Hi [이름],
I agree that music has so many things that can help us. It can soothe and calm us. It can also encourage or sometimes be angry according to the lyrics.
Enjoy the music of life.
^^kaye^^
Nowdays, I enjoy listening pop songs, because pop song is more emotional and not to fed up with them.
>>Nowadays, I enjoy listening to pop songs because pop song is more emotional and it’s not easy to be fed up with them
Espeacailly, I like the fray and onerepublic which are Ameracan musicain.
>>Especially, I like the Fray and One Republic which are American musicians.
Their songs are so nice and have beautiful lyrics which make me to be sympathized with them.
>>Their songs are so nice and have beautiful lyrics which make me sympathized with them.
And thier melody is also really beautiful, whenever, I listen to their music,I'm so happy and never forget to their songs.
>> And their melody is also really beautiful whenever, I listen to their music. I'm so happy and I never forgot their songs.
Yesterday, exactly nowadays, I felt so bad and depressed due to many reasons.
>>correct
I need something which can make me recover.
>>correct
I expect this, while I am listening to music.
>> I expect this while I am listening to music.
Anyway, I hope, beautiful songs will be made continually.
>> Anyway, I hope beautiful songs will be made continually.
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