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We, Korea, have a sentence that TV is an idiot because TV precludes by people's thinking. Watching properly TV time is useful to get rid of stress but, if it too much, it's a waste time and even you're more tired. So, I recommend people that do not use too much your TV especially, if you're young.
If you watch too much TV, you can find that many advertises are in. Sometimes, it's helpful for customers to get product's information. But, it's only tell the good things and benefits of products so that customers must be smart. We should check what is advantages and disadvantages from competitors.
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We, Korea, have a sentence that TV is an idiot because TV precludes by people\'s thinking.
>>YOU MEAN:We, Koreans has a saying that watching TV is an idiot thing to do because TV precludes the people\'s good way of thinking.
Watching properly TV time is useful to get rid of stress but, if it too much, it\'s a waste time and even you\'re more tired.
>>Watching TV is useful to get rid of stress but too much is a waste of time and you can get tired.
So, I recommend people that do not use too much your TV especially, if you\'re young.
>>I recommend people not to watch TV too much specially to young ones.If you watch too much TV, you can find that many advertises are in.
>>If you watch TV too much you can find many advertisements.
OR:If you watch TV too much you can find many unneccessary and not so important advertisements.
Sometimes, it\'s helpful for customers to get product\'s information.
>>Sometimes it is helpful for customers in getting the product\'s information.
OR:Sometimes it\'s a big help for customers to get the product\'s information through advertisement.
But, it\'s only tell the good things and benefits of products so that customers must be smart.
>>But advertisements tells only the good things and benefits of the product,so,customers must be smart.
OR:However, advertisements tells only the good things including the benefits of their products that\'s why customers must be wise enough nowadays.
We should check what is advantages and disadvantages from competitors.
>>We should always check the advantages and disadvantages of every product.
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