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2013-07-15 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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All people must work to make a money, except riches. It's the one way to live and some people satisfied their jobs, others do not. To satisfy in your workplace, it's very important. Most of your time, you'll spend in your workplace and it'll be large amount of time. So, if you happy when you're work, you're lucky person. I think most of people can't satisfied in workplaces and it has many reasons like salary, location, holidays or etc. Sometimes, I have seen articles that the biggest complians of company is salary and the biggest reason of change job is also salry. To make money is important but, try to find your vision in workplaces and try to do best in your field. After that, if you're professional in your field, money can be followed automatically.

강사 첨삭

Good evening! 

You shared a good insight about the homework for today.

Good job!
You\'re right when you said that there are many reasons for changing jobs or changing companies.

It\'s also true that people do not get easily satisfied.

I think that\'s human nature.

Anyway, enjoy your evening!
I\'ll see you first thing tomorrow.

All people must work to make a money, except riches.

>>>All people must work to make money, except the rich ones.

It\'s the one way to live and some people satisfied their jobs, others do not.

>>>It\'s the only way to live. Some people are satisfied with their jobs, while others are not.

To satisfy in your workplace, it\'s very important.

>>>To be satisfied in your workplace is very important.

>>>Or: To be contented in your workplace is very important.

Most of your time, you\'ll spend in your workplace and it\'ll be large amount of time.

>>>Most of your time will be spent in your workplace, and it\'ll be a long time.

So, if you happy when you\'re work, you\'re lucky person.

>>>So, if you\'re happy when you\'re at work, then you\'re a lucky person.

I think most of people can\'t satisfied in workplaces and it has many reasons like salary, location, holidays or etc.

>>>I think most people are not satisfied in their workplaces and it has many reasons like salary, location, holidays, etc.

Sometimes, I have seen articles that the biggest complians of company is salary and the biggest reason of change job is also salry.

>>>Sometimes, I have seen articles which state that the biggest complaints in a company is the salary, and the biggest reason for a change of job is also salary-related.

To make money is important but, try to find your vision in workplaces and try to do best in your field.

>>>To make money is important, but try to find your vision in workplaces and try to do your best in your field.

>>>Or: Making money is important, but try to find your  vision in your workplace and try to do your best in your field.

After that, if you\'re professional in your field, money can be followed automatically.

>>>After that, if you\'re a professional in your field, money will automatically follow.

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