homework
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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: If you would become invisible in one day, how would you spend your day???
Maria~~!!! I am very sorry yesterday~..
yesterday. Something must be wrong with the computer
but today everything will be ok~!!
If I would become invisible in one day, I would stay in my home all day.
Because, If I go outside, maybe I will be afraid of everything. I will be in danger of being threatened by something.
Therefore I would rather be in my home~!! There I will listen to all musics without any prejudice~!! and I will observe my family's voices~!! maybe It is interesting~
maybe I can love them more ~ ever before by observing them. I can experience death indirectly. Because when I was child, I thought that If i die, I can't see anything. So I can have time for serious self-reflection. Then the day will be end~!!
강사 첨삭
Hi there!!!
Wow...Thank you for doing your homework.
I have a song for you. Do you know the song in Glee
which starts with \"Just a small town girl....living in this...\"
I think that is a good song for you to learn because you
want to stay at home even if you are invisible.
I will see you later (^^) Cheers!!!!
HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:ESSAY: If you would become invisible in one day, how would you spend your day???Maria~~!!! I am very sorry yesterday~..
>> Correctyesterday. Something must be wrong with the computer
>> Yesterday, there must be something wrong with the computerbut today everything will be ok~!!
>> CorrectIf I would become invisible in one day, I would stay in my home all day.
>> Correct or
>> If I would become invisible in a day, I would stay at home all day.
Because, If I go outside, maybe I will be afraid of everything.
>> Correct or
>> Because, if I go outside, I might become afraid of everything.
I will be in danger of being threatened by something.
>> CorrectTherefore I would rather be in my home~!!
>> Correct
There I will listen to all musics without any prejudice~!! and I will observe my family\'s voices~!! maybe It is interesting~
>> Correct >>music >> Correct >>it
maybe I can love them more ~ ever before by observing them.
>> Correct or
>> Perhaps I can love them more, more than before by just observing them.
I can experience death indirectly.
>> Correct
Because when I was child, I thought that If i die, I can\'t see anything.
>> When I was a child, I thought that if I die, I won\'t be able to see anything and anybody again.
So I can have time for serious self-reflection.
>> So now I have time for serious self reflection.
Then the day will be end~!!
>> you may remove this sentence
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