Homework#33
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HW#33 Can you think of some advantages and disadvantages of the free Wi-Fi access in your country?
I think the first advantage is that we can use affordable mobile phone bill. Even if we use inexpensive mobile plans, there are Wi-Fi everywhere, so there\'s no problem using those plans. the second advantages is that Wi-Fi is faster that 3G or LTE. So, it make us more convenient.
But, there are some disadvantages. One of them is security problem. I\'ve seen a video about mobile security. when someone use public Wi-Fi, hacker can access his or her personal information easily. So, I think it is the worst thing about the free Wi-Fi.
Honestly, I have never had such an experience in Korea for 25 years.
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Hi Jonathan!
I think you are improving in your writing skill. I see less grammar lapses unlike before.
Way to go!
Here are the corrections.
I think the first advantage is that we can use affordable mobile phone bill. Even if we use inexpensive mobile plans, there are Wi-Fi everywhere, so there\'s no problem using those plans.
>>I think the first advantage is that we can use affordable mobile phone bill. Even if we use cheap mobile plans, there are Wi-Fi\'s everywhere, so there\'s no problem using those plans.
the second advantages is that Wi-Fi is faster that 3G or LTE. So, it make us more convenient.
>>The second advantage is that Wi-Fi is faster than 3G or LTE. So, it makes us feel more convenient.
But, there are some disadvantages. One of them is security problem.
>>But, there are some disadvantages. One of them is the security problem.
I\'ve seen a video about mobile security. when someone use public Wi-Fi, hacker can access his or her personal information easily.
>>I\'ve seen a video about mobile security. When someone uses public Wi-Fi, hacker can access his or her personal information easily.
So, I think it is the worst thing about the free Wi-Fi. Honestly, I have never had such an experience in Korea for 25 years.
>>So, I think it is the worst thing about free Wi-Fi. Honestly, I have never had such an experience in Korea for 25 years.
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