Homework~
학생이 쓴 원문
ESSAY:Do social-networking sites such as Facebook and MySpace enhance a young person's social life or serve as a substitute for a real social life? Support your position with arguments
I always sorry for late homework. I regret delaying my homework.. ㅜㅜ
for some days. I was confused abut my puppy and I idled my time away. I must be pain.. I wasn't able to pull my thoughts together. now I can't still think straight anymore.. but I decide to face my troubles. Although nothing works out, my present the way I look is not what I wanted. I will try to become what I wanted.
I don't agree. Now it is information-oriented society. But virtual reality is different from reality. In virtual reality, somebody can get along with other people although somebody is shy and unsociable. the relationship in the virtual reality is different from it in reality. There can be many friends and people in virtual reality. However sincere friendship or relationship is little in it.
강사 첨삭
Hi there^^,
Oh i\'m so sorry about your puppy.
I guess you still haven\'t heard anything about him.
As I have said, just think that he is in good hands.
No one would hurt a cute, little puppy.
See you later^^
~T.Maria~
ESSAY:Do social-networking sites such as Facebook and MySpace enhance a young person\'s social life or serve as a substitute for a real social life? Support your position with arguments I always sorry for late homework. I regret delaying my homework.. ㅜㅜ for some days.
>> Correct
I was confused abut my puppy and I idled my time away.
>> I was confused about my puppy so I just want to have an idle time.
I must be pain..
>> Correct
I wasn\'t able to pull my thoughts together.
>> Correct
now I can\'t still think straight anymore.. but I decide to face my troubles.
>> Now I can\'t think straight anymore, but I decided to face my troubles.
Although nothing works out, my present the way I look is not what I wanted. I will try to become what I wanted.
>> My present situation is not what I wanted but I will try to become someone who I wanted to be even if nothing works out now.
I don\'t agree.
>> Correct
Now it is information-oriented society.
>> Nowadays, we are in an information - oriented society.
But virtual reality is different from reality.
>> Correct
In virtual reality, somebody can get along with other people although somebody is shy and unsociable.
>> Correct >> even if
the relationship in the virtual reality is different from it in reality.
>>The...
>> Correct
There can be many friends and people in virtual reality. However sincere friendship or relationship is little in it.
>> Correct
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