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2013-07-22 · 첨삭 강사 Maria

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ESSAY: In Britain, when someone gets old, they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who should be responsible for our old people? Give reasons. I think that goverment should be responsible for our old people. umm.. In this society, young people work for the public good. And they improve society to make lives better. However our old people also had been young people. They also had worked to contribute this society. If they didn't exist, this present society would not exist. They are not burden to this society. Therefore, goverment should care for our old people. It is not only duty that we have to have, but also manner to be respectful to our elders

강사 첨삭

Hi there!!!     Wow Very well said.     HOw are you today? I hope you are feeling better. I miss you already. I will see you later. Take care. ~T.Maria~   ESSAY: In Britain, when someone gets old, they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who should be responsible for our old people? Give reasons.I think that goverment should be responsible for our old people. >> CORRECT >> I think that the goverment should be responsible for our old people. umm.. In this society, young people work for the public good. >> CORRECT                                               >>the good of the public.  And they improve society to make lives better. >> CORRECT However our old people also had been young people. >> However, our old people had also bee young people at one time. They also had worked to contribute this society. >> CORRECT                                   >> to this society. If they didn\'t exist, this present society would not exist. >> CORRECT They are not burden to this society. >> They are not a burden to this society. Therefore, goverment should care for our old people.    >> Therefore, the goverment should care for our old people.    >> CORRECT  It is not only duty that we have to have, but also manner to be respectful to our elders >> It is not only our duty that we have to do, but we also have to be respectful to our elders.  

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