homework:)

2013-07-24 · 첨삭 강사 Risa

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HOMEWORK FOR THE DAY: Which celebrity would you like to swap places with? I sometimes dream of becoming a film celebrity. When I was young boy, I wanted to be an actor. In the movie, I can be a young CEO of the major company or I can be a fight pilot. I can make a lot of money, I can help the weak person, I can defend the country. Of course, I can make many friends who are famous actors and actress. Wow! Imagine these things, that make me happy and will be a good experience to me. If I am a film celebrity, I would go abroad. "Hollywood" First of all, I will make My hand printing there.

강사 첨삭

Charles, the superstar! I can imagine that happening! I truly can! :)

Thank you for sharing this amazing essay! 

I enjoyed every detail. 

See ya later. :)


Cheers, 

T.Risa


HOMEWORK FOR THE DAY:

Which celebrity would you like to swap places with?

I sometimes dream of becoming a film celebrity.

>> I sometimes dream of becoming a film actor.

When I was young boy, I wanted to be an actor.

>> When I was young, I wanted to be an actor.

In the movie, I can be a young CEO of the major company or I can be a fight pilot.

>> In the movies, I can be a young CEO of a big company or a pilot.

I can make a lot of money, I can help the weak person, I can defend the country.

>> I can earn a lot of money, I can help the weak, I can defend the country.

Of course, I can make many friends who are famous actors and actress.

>> Of course, I can befriend famous actors and actresses.

Wow! 

>> Correct

Imagine these things, that make me happy and will be a good experience to me.

>> Imagining these things makes me happy and is a good experience for me.

If I am a film celebrity, I would go abroad. \"Hollywood\"

>> If I were a celebrity, I would go to Hollywood.

First of all, I will make My hand printing there.

>> I would have my name printed on the Hollywood Walk of Fame.

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