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2013-07-30 · 첨삭 강사 Chelsea

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If you could travel back in time, where would you go? I want to come back do-cheu in japan. it is a cityhall of japan. 10 years ago, I went to there, sloving my physical problem. at that time, I confused of my job. and, i travel the city to see the famuse build designed by World Presentive Architect. It was a cool time for me. I could show and feel the good space. also, there was a special event. I met the mistery woman who stay a same house. she wanted to have a trip with me. and we enjoy for 3 days.

강사 첨삭

Hi there^^, Thank you for sending me your homework! :) You did a great job expressing your ideas. Keep it up! Yes, I think you had a great time in your trip in Japan. I would love to hear more about this story in our next class. May yoou have a great day and take care! ~T. Chelsea~ If you could travel back in time, where would you go?I want to come back do-cheu in japan. it is a cityhall of japan.>>I want to go back to do-cheu in Japan. It is a city hall of japan.10 years ago, I went to there, sloving my physical problem. >>10 years ago, I wen there to solve my problems. at that time, I confused of my job. >>At that time, I was confused about my job.and, i travel the city to see the famuse build designed by World Presentive Architect. >>I travelled to the city to see the famous building designed by World Presentive Architect. It was a cool time for me. >>CORRECT! I could show and feel the good space.>>CORRECT!also, there was a special event. >>CORRECT! I met the mistery woman who stay a same house. she wanted to have a trip with me. and we enjoy for 3 days. >>I met a mystery woman who stayed at the same house. She wanted to have a trip with me and we enjoyed the trip for 3 days.  

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