homework
학생이 쓴 원문
when I was 4 grades,I had a piano contest.
Because,My Piano Teacher choose me the best pianist.
I played telaman No.6 symphony.
Finally,I'm the nsecond place winner.
So It was the happiest time of my life.
강사 첨삭
Hi there!
How are you!! Wow it is so great to wake up every morning right?
Yeah I know, sometimes I also feel lazy.. But we need to enjoy every single day!
I was surprised to know that you play the piano well! Again, I am envious T^T
I also know how to play some like the drums and the xylophone.
I can\'t play the guitar because I am left-handed. Most of the guitars are made for the right- handed as we know. TT
On the other hand, work on your prepositions, Tom^^
They are a very important part of studying English.
You may also try to combine some sentences if they are too short. ;)
Let\'s check it over >.<
when I was 4 grades,I had a piano contest.
>>When I was in fourth grade, I joined a piano contest.Because,My Piano Teacher choose me the best pianist.>>Because my piano teacher chose me as the best pianist.
I played telaman No.6 symphony.
>>I played the Telaman Number 6 Symphony.
>>We can combine them like:
>>When I was in fourth grade, I joined a piano contest because my piano teacher chose me as the best pianist.Finally,I\'m the nsecond place winner.
>>Finally, I was the second place winner.So It was the happiest time of my life.
>>So, it was the happiest time of my life.
>> Therefore, it was the most exciting time of my life.
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