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2013-08-09 · 첨삭 강사 Sheela

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Have you ever found a large amount of money on the street? If not, what would you do if you did? If I will find the a lot of money on the street, I will buy the I-Pad. I always amby them which have a that specailly on the subway. because, I enjoy the movie when I take a train. It is hard to see the movie because the screen size is too small. And, I hope to use to have a conversation with my student throughout the I-Pad. I think my class is sometimes boiling. we need a different something and I use the photo and movie on I-Pad when I explain something for my student

강사 첨삭

Hi there! Good morning!^^
Thank you for doing your homework. I can see you are very eager to learn.

Good job! Keep it up!

Please check out the corrections I made.
Take care always... See you soon...

Have you ever found a large amount of money on the street? If not, what would you do if you did?
If I will find the a lot of money on the street, I will buy the I-Pad. 
>>If I found a lot a of money on the street, I will buy an iPad.

I always amby them which have a that specailly on the subway. because, I enjoy the movie when I take a train.
>>I always envy those who have that specially on the subway because I enjoy watching movies when I take the train.

It is hard to see the movie because the screen size is too small.
>>Correct!!

>> Or It is hard to watch the movie because the screen is too small.

And, I hope to use to have a conversation with my student throughout the I-Pad.
>>And, I hope to use the iPad to have a conversation with my student. 

I think my class is sometimes boiling. we need a different something and I use the photo and movie on I-Pad when I explain something for my student

>>I think my class is sometimes boring, we need something different. I use the iPad to show photos and/or movies when I explain something to my student.

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