homework
학생이 쓴 원문
I can only sacrifice basis things to protect the human race
If the human race would be destroyed in the future I think global warming is the reason.
I watched TV show introducing about the global warming.
Nowadays people don’t save energy such as water, electricity.
So global warming happened. Actually this affects our nature.
For example the more The Antarctic glaciers are gradually melting the more the sea level is rising.
I think this would threat us.
I will not take a shower within almost 3minutes not for long time to protect it
And not turn on the air condition in a long time.
I think we can protect when I first only reduce desire.
If we realized only after happening global warning we would definitely regret.
강사 첨삭
Good morning [이름]!
This is fast... Don\'t you have work? kkkkkkk
Well anyways, I do agree with you that global warming is the number one problem in our world today.
People should be more aware of it.
Good composition.
Watch our on how you write your ideas because they seem not to be in line with what you mean^^
Good Job!
Enjoy your weekend and I will see you on Monday
Always,
~Aimee^^
>> I can only sacrifice basic things to protect the human race.
If the human race would be destroyed in the future I think global warming is the reason.
If the human race would be destroyed in the future I think global warming is the reason.
>> Correct
I watched TV show introducing about the global warming.
I watched TV show introducing about the global warming.
>> I watched a TV show about global warming.
Nowadays people don’t save energy such as water, electricity.
Nowadays people don’t save energy such as water, electricity.
>> Nowadays, people don\'t know how to save energy such as water and electricity.
So global warming happened.
So global warming happened.
>> That is why there is global warning.
>> That is why global warming happens.
Actually this affects our nature.
>> Correct
For example the more The Antarctic glaciers are gradually melting the more the sea level is rising.
For example the more The Antarctic glaciers are gradually melting the more the sea level is rising.
>> Correct
>> For example, the more The Antarctic glaciers are gradually melting the more the sea level is rising.
I think this would threat us.
>> I think this is a threat to us.
I will not take a shower within almost 3minutes not for long time to protect it
I think this would threat us.
>> I think this is a threat to us.
I will not take a shower within almost 3minutes not for long time to protect it
>> I only turn on the shower within 3 minutes and not for a long time to conserve energy.
And not turn on the air condition in a long time.
>> I also don\'t turn on the air conditioner for a very long time.
I think we can protect when I first only reduce desire.
And not turn on the air condition in a long time.
>> I also don\'t turn on the air conditioner for a very long time.
I think we can protect when I first only reduce desire.
>> I think we can protect humanity if we can just reduce our desire for things.
If we realized only after happening global warning we would definitely regret.
If we realized only after happening global warning we would definitely regret.
>> If we just realize what is happening in our world, we would definitely regret all our actions.
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