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2010-11-19 · 첨삭 강사 Connie

학생이 쓴 원문

what is your paradise? My paradise? Maybe It's my home. In my home, I can read books and take a rest without any interferences. If I'm sleey, I ca go to bed. It's the best place where I'll do with my own. ^^

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름],

Surely, home is a real paradise for you!

^^ But I was expecting a longer composition.

Anyway, good job! 

- Teacher Grace

My paradise?

>>Correct

Maybe it's my home.

>>Correct
In my home, I can read books and take a rest without any interferences.

>> At home, I can read books and take a rest without any interference.

If I'm sleepy, I ca go to bed.

>>Correct

It's the best place where I'll do with my own. ^^

>> It’s the best place where I can do my own stuff.

 

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