Homework
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- Essay -
Q. Should student's textbooks be replaced by notebook computers?
A. I think it's never good for students to replace textbooks with notebook computer.
There are definitely strong advantages to use textbooks.
Firstly, I believe that analogue system is better to improve a brain than digital system. Especially, writing is best way to develope the way you think and imagine.
Secondly, I heard about the 'popcorn brain', it is caused by frequent stimulation of digital signal. It must be given to students with fatal influence.
In conclusion, it's best to combine each advantages of textbooks and notebook computers.
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- Essay -Q. Should student\'s textbooks be replaced by notebook computers?A. I think it\'s never good for students to replace textbooks with notebook computer.>> I think it\'s not good for student to replace textbooks with notebook computers.There are definitely strong advantages to use textbooks.>> Definitely, there are strong advantages of using textbooks.Firstly, I believe that analogue system is better to improve a brain than digital system.
>> Firstly, I believe that an analogue system is better to enhance brain functions than a digital system.
>> OR: First, I believe that an analogue system is better than a digital in improving brain functions.
Especially, writing is best way to develope the way you think and imagine.>> Writing is the best way to develop the way you think and imagine.
>> OR: Writing is the best way to develop your peception and imagination.Secondly, I heard about the \'popcorn brain\', it is caused by frequent stimulation of digital signal.
>> Secondly, I heard about the \'popcorn brain\', it is caused by frequent stimulation of a digital signal.
It must be given to students with fatal influence.>> Correct! In conclusion, it\'s best to combine each advantages of textbooks and notebook computers.
>> In conclusion, it\'s best to combine the advantages of textbooks and notebook computers.
>> OR: In conclusion, it\'s best to combine the advantages of using textbooks and notebook computers.
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