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Hi [이름],
This is a very good movie. Usually "Mafia" movies depict this kind of lifestyle. They are becoming rich because of their illegal actions. but at the end they will lose all their riches because they will be caught by the authority. Anyway, I will do my best to correct your sentences. Have a nice day and take care always.
I watched movie which the title is 'illegal dealing' yesterday.
>>>Yesterday, I watched a movie entitled "Illegal Dealing"
This movie is the most popular nowdays.
>>>This is one of the most popular movies today.
It was so fun and attractive movie to me, of course many people are same with me, thinking about this movie.
>>>The movie was fun and interesting, Many people has the same perception like me about the movie
This movie described about illegality in our society.
>>>This movie describes about illegal things in our society.
Some people have been making many crimes without any restraint.
>>>Some people have been doing alot of crimes without getting caught
Also they have a happy life, and others also made a success by using illegal.
>>>They also live a happy life, and other people are successful because of their illegal actions.
After all, they got a punishment, these aren't enough to make our society clear.
>>>In the end, everybody received a punishment. This is not enough to may our society peaceful.
It was so impressive, and made me to think something.
>>>It was impressive it made me think about something.
Anyway, I had a good time, due to this movie. I was satisfied.
>>>Anyway, I was really satisfied and have a good time because of the movie.
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