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2013-09-17 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Boys are most influenced by their fathers; girls are most influenced by their mothers. I can't agree with this opinion. It can't explain some cases. For example, I saw a boy whose father is quiet and whose mother is talkative. The boy was talkative. I think both mother and father influence their child and the more influencial person would be the parent who spend more time than the other. But even though I spent more time with my mother, my characteristic is more like my father's. There are so many examples I can find everywhere, proving that opinion isn't right. Maybe if the sentence is "Boys are more likely to do things with their fathers;girls are more likely to do things with their mothers", it would be right. Most of boys like playing sports and activities. However most girls like sitting in somewhere and doing not active things. But, there's always some exceptions and I think I am one of the exceptions. Anyway, in conclusion, I cannot agree. Sorry for late!

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Hi again, Sarah!~~ Your homework is very clear and amazing because you made yourself clear!^.^ I want to commend on your creativity when you construct your sentences. There were only few flaws and I already gave the corrections below. Keep up the good work my dear student! Thank you for spending time and have a great holiday! ~~Teacher Erine~~   Boys are most influenced by their fathers; girls are most influenced by their mothers.I can\'t agree with this opinion. >>Correct. It can\'t explain some cases. >>Correct. or>>I can\'t explain most cases. For example, I saw a boy whose father is quiet and whose mother is talkative. >>Correct. The boy was talkative. I think both mother and father influence their child and the more influencial person would be the parent who spend more time than the other. >>Correct. or>>I think, the most influencial is the one who spends more quality time with the child. But even though I spent more time with my mother, my characteristic is more like my father\'s. >>Correct. There are so many examples I can find everywhere, proving that opinion isn\'t right. >>There are so many examples I can find everywhere, proving that this opinion isn\'t right. Maybe if the sentence is \"Boys are more likely to do things with their fathers;girls are more likely to do things with their mothers\", it would be right. >>Maybe if the sentence was... it would be right. Most of boys like playing sports and activities. >>Most boys like playing sports and activities. However most girls like sitting in somewhere and doing not active things. >>However, most girls like sitting somewhere and doing not active things. But, there\'s always some exceptions and I think I am one of the exceptions. >>But there are always some exceptions and I think I am one of these. Anyway, in conclusion, I cannot agree. >>Correct.Sorry for late! >>Sorr for being late.

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