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2013-09-23 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Tell what to do in an earthquake. As I will be a police officer in near future, I have to save other people first. But priority always exists as I am human. I will help and save my family firstly and after I'll look for others. Police should find a safe place, take people to the shelter, prepare dried food, et cetera. One more, they should calm down the shocked and injured people. I can't say that my safety doesn't matter but if I have to [이름]ose between other's safety, I have to save others. I should save others. I don't used to sacrifying for others before but I think my s[이름]ol brainwashed me. Haha. If I have spare time even in an earthquake, I don't think so, anyway I will play League of Legend!!!!!!!! It's really really exciting!! How was your chu-seok holiday?

강사 첨삭

Happy Monday, Sarah! A big smile to appreciate you for doing your homework!^.^ You missed some grammar rules but I know you can improve them by reviewing them. We don\'t celebrate Chu-seok here in the Philippines, but I was able to use my time to take a rest and to recuperate my energy. Thank you for asking! See you in class!~ ~~Teacher Erine~~   Tell what to do in an earthquake.As I will be a police officer in near future, I have to save other people first. >>As I will be a police officer in the near future, I will have to save other people first. But priority always exists as I am human. >>Correct. I will help and save my family firstly and after I\'ll look for others. >>I will help and save my family first then I\'ll look for the others.Police should find a safe place, take people to the shelter, prepare dried food, et cetera. >>Correct. One more, they should calm down the shocked and injured people. >>Correct. I can\'t say that my safety doesn\'t matter but if I have to [이름]ose between other\'s safety, I have to save others. I should save others. >>I can\'t say that my safety doesn\'t matter but if I have to [이름]ose between other\'s safety and mine, I have to save other people. I don\'t used to sacrifying for others before but I think my s[이름]ol brainwashed me. Haha.>>I am not used to sacrificing for others before but I think my s[이름]ol brainwashed me. If I have spare time even in an earthquake, I don\'t think so, anyway I will play League of Legend!!!!!!!! It\'s really really exciting!! >>If I have a spare time even in an earthquake, which I don\'t think is going to happen, I will play League of Legend! It\'s really exciting!How was your chu-seok holiday? >>Correct.

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