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Today, I watched olympic games on T.V. Many players competed for their winnig. As I told the name of games which I saw, Archery, swimming, badminton, etc. Among them, I really enjoyed watching Archery, because, while they were competing, their score were up and down. So it was made me to be strained. Of course, Korea team won the game. I screamed, due to my extreme feeling. Anyway, I had a good time with olympic games.

Hi [이름]. Did you mean Sea Games? I think Olympic is already finished last year. Anyway, here are the corrections: Today, I watched olympic games on T.V. Many players competed for their winnig. As I told the >> Today, I watched the different events in the SEA Games. Many players are competing. As I name of games which I saw, Archery, swimming, badminton, etc. Among them, I really enjoyed >> have mentioned, I saw a lot of events such as archery, swimming, badminton, etc. I really  enjoyed watching Archery, because, while they were competing, their score were up and down. >> enjoyed watching archery the most because as the archers compete, their scores go up and down. So it was made me to be strained. Of course, Korea team won the game. I screamed, due to my >> So, it somewhat stressed me. But of course, Korean team won. I  even screamed because extreme feeling. Anyway, I had a good time with olympic games. >> I was extremely happy. Anyway, I had a good time watching the SEA Games.