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2013-10-15 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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* I can't think of the word I want to use now. * The word sentimental means some feeling make you sorrow or recall your missing memorize. * I have a sentimental object, that is a waste. When l was a teenage, I had threw a disposable cup away on the bus. On the way my home, I got on a same number bus. Amazingly, there still was a disposable cup that I had trewp away. I was really ambrrassed about my fault. So, I picked it up, and still I keep in my letter box. And I promise myself don't throw a waste away on a public place. * I don't want to be immortal. I read about It the book "Gulliver". There is a land where immorals live in. They not only live everlasting but also are aging everlasting. They are too old to do anything. I think it's just a curse. Even thouhg, If I could be an immoral with youth and healty forever, I don't want it neither. Because nobody understand and emphasize me, so I couldn't make real friends and family. It's as like to live alone on the earth forever.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [이름]! 
Are you having a good day today?

I do hope so. ^^

I also think being immortal is not really cool. 

I am watching some drama or movies where there are immortal people who wants to become mortal and happy to face death. 

And I think I am also one of them. 

Being immortal maybe will make me tired. 

Yeah, I would still love to make my life longer but not too long. 

I recommend you to watch the movie \"In Time\". 

It\'s an American movie. 

It\'s one of my favorite movies actually. ^^

It is connected with our topic immortality. 

See you again tomorrow Ms. [이름]! 
Enjoy the rest of the day! 


Always, 
Kathrine ^^


* I can\'t think of the word I want to use now.

>>  I can\'t think of a word that I want to use now.

>> or: I can\'t think of a word to express what I want to say. 

* The word sentimental means some feeling make you sorrow or recall your missing memorize.

>>  The word sentimental means some feelings which makes you sorrowful or makes you recall some memories. 

* I have a sentimental object, that is a waste.

>>   correct! 

When l was a teenage, I had threw a disposable cup away on the bus. 

>> When I was a teenager, I threw a disposable cup away in the bus. 

On the way my home, I got on a same number bus.

>>   On my way home, I got on to the same bus. 

Amazingly, there still was a disposable cup that I had trewp away.

>>   Amazingly, the disposable cup that I threw away was still there. 

I was really ambrrassed about my fault.

>>  I was really embarrassed on what I did. 

So, I picked it up, and still I keep in my letter box.

>>  So I picked it up and I still keep it in my letter box. 

And I promise myself don\'t throw a waste away on a public place. 

>>  And I promised myself not to throw a waste on a public place. 

* I don\'t want to be immortal.

>> correct! 

I read about It the book \"Gulliver\".

>>  I read about it in the book \"Gulliver\". 

There is a land where immorals live in.

>>  There is a land where immortals live in/ 

They not only live everlasting but also are aging everlasting.

>>  They do not only live forever but they are also not aging. 

They are too old to do anything.

>>  correct! 

I think it\'s just a curse.

>> correct! 

Even thouhg, If I could be an immoral with youth and healty forever, I don\'t want it neither.

>>  Even though I could be immortal being young and healthy forever, I don\'t want it neither. 

Because nobody understand and emphasize me, so I couldn\'t make real friends and family.

>>  Because nobody understands and and emphasizes me, so I couldn\'t make real friends and family. 

It\'s as like to live alone on the earth forever.

>>  It\'s the same as living alone in this world forever. 

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