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Hi there Ms. [이름]!
Are you having a good day today?
I do hope so. ^^
I also think being immortal is not really cool.
I am watching some drama or movies where there are immortal people who wants to become mortal and happy to face death.
And I think I am also one of them.
Being immortal maybe will make me tired.
Yeah, I would still love to make my life longer but not too long.
I recommend you to watch the movie \"In Time\".
It\'s an American movie.
It\'s one of my favorite movies actually. ^^
It is connected with our topic immortality.
See you again tomorrow Ms. [이름]!
Enjoy the rest of the day!
Always,
Kathrine ^^
* I can\'t think of the word I want to use now.
>> I can\'t think of a word that I want to use now.
>> or: I can\'t think of a word to express what I want to say.
* The word sentimental means some feeling make you sorrow or recall your missing memorize.
>> The word sentimental means some feelings which makes you sorrowful or makes you recall some memories.
* I have a sentimental object, that is a waste.
>> correct!
When l was a teenage, I had threw a disposable cup away on the bus.
>> When I was a teenager, I threw a disposable cup away in the bus.
On the way my home, I got on a same number bus.
>> On my way home, I got on to the same bus.
Amazingly, there still was a disposable cup that I had trewp away.
>> Amazingly, the disposable cup that I threw away was still there.
I was really ambrrassed about my fault.
>> I was really embarrassed on what I did.
So, I picked it up, and still I keep in my letter box.
>> So I picked it up and I still keep it in my letter box.
And I promise myself don\'t throw a waste away on a public place.
>> And I promised myself not to throw a waste on a public place.
* I don\'t want to be immortal.
>> correct!
I read about It the book \"Gulliver\".
>> I read about it in the book \"Gulliver\".
There is a land where immorals live in.
>> There is a land where immortals live in/
They not only live everlasting but also are aging everlasting.
>> They do not only live forever but they are also not aging.
They are too old to do anything.
>> correct!
I think it\'s just a curse.
>> correct!
Even thouhg, If I could be an immoral with youth and healty forever, I don\'t want it neither.
>> Even though I could be immortal being young and healthy forever, I don\'t want it neither.
Because nobody understand and emphasize me, so I couldn\'t make real friends and family.
>> Because nobody understands and and emphasizes me, so I couldn\'t make real friends and family.
It\'s as like to live alone on the earth forever.
>> It\'s the same as living alone in this world forever.
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