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2013-11-20 · 첨삭 강사 Leah

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<composition> I have had health problems. I have had a cold, a headache or indigestion. That was usually when my immune system was bad. I think that when I got a lot of stress, my immune system became bad. And irregular eating habit made me unhealthy too. At that time, I usually went to the hospital and took medicine. Some nutrient food helped me recover. I tried to exercise after I got better. I think that nowadays, Koreans exercise very often. We can see the exercising people in the neighborhood easily. There are so many people in the fitness center or gym after work. I usually go jogging in the park nearby my house on weekends. I don't have enough time to exercise on week because I have to work late.

강사 첨삭

Hi there!^^

You must take care of your health in order to avoid more serious problems^^

Remember, prevention is really better than cure!^^

Have a great Wednesday^^ See you!

I have had health problems.

>>CORRECT!
I have had a cold, a headache or indigestion.
>>CORRECT!

That was usually when my immune system was bad.
>>That was usual when my immune system had gone haywire.

I think that when I got a lot of stress, my immune system became bad.

>>CORRECT!
And irregular eating habit made me unhealthy too.

>>Furthermore, irregular eating habits made me unhealthy too.
At that time, I usually went to the hospital and took medicine.

>>CORRECT!
Some nutrient food helped me recover.

>>Some nutritious food helped me recover.
I tried to exercise after I got better.

>>CORRECT!

>>I tried to exercise after feeling better.

>>Upon feeling better, I tried to exercise.
I think that nowadays, Koreans exercise very often.
>>CORRECT!

We can see the exercising people in the neighborhood easily.

>>We can easily see people exercising in the neighborhood.
There are so many people in the fitness center or gym after work.
>>CORRECT!

I usually go jogging in the park nearby my house on weekends.

>>CORRECT!
I don\'t have enough time to exercise on week because I have to work late.

>>I don\'t have enough time to exercise on weekdays because I have to work late.

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