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2013-11-20 · 첨삭 강사 Chelsea

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I want to change blind-date when I was university school 3 grade winter. Because My plan after graduated school was changed by this moment. At that time, I met the beautiful woman at the blind-date recommended by one of my friend. She and I was attracted each other and We spent the time together from 3 grade winter to 4 grade summer. I did not study anything because felling love to her. Time to go, I had to change my future plan. Before met the girl, I had a plan to go to the graduated university in the America. During date, I always worried about my behavior which enjoy the girl such as going the picnic, having a conversation all the time. Although I study something, my mind always consider about her. As a result, I could not go to the America. Also we brook up at 4grade autumn. and I got the job after finishing the school. Nowaday, when I think about the my past time, it was a big mistake to meet her. After the accident, I never do same mistake to fell in love perfectly.

강사 첨삭

Hello there!   Thank you so much for having the time to make your homework. Too much is not really good. Most of the time we should always balance everything - your schooling and your love life. But forget about the past. Move on and learn from your mistakes^^T. ChelseaI want to change blind-date when I was university school 3 grade winter. >> I want to change blind date when I was in University, Junior/third year and it was winter.Because My plan after graduated school was changed by this moment.>> Because my plan changed after I graduated.At that time, I met the beautiful woman at the blind-date recommended by one of my friend. >> At that time, I met a beautiful woman in a blind date recommended by one of my friends.She and I was attracted each other and We spent the time together from 3 grade winter to 4 grade summer. >> She and I were attracted to each other and we spent time together from out third year to our fourth year. I did not study anything because felling love to her. >> I did not learn anything because I was really in love with her.Time to go, I had to change my future plan. >> But it\'s time to let go and I had to change my plans.Before met the girl, I had a plan to go to the graduated university in the America. >> Before I met the girl, my plan is to go to graduate school in America.During date, I always worried about my behavior which enjoy the girl such as going the picnic, having a conversation all the time. >> During our date, I\'m always worried about my behavior when we go picnic, and having conversation all the time.Although I study something, my mind always consider about her.>> Although I learn something, I always think of her. As a result, I could not go to the America.>> As a result, I couldn\'t go to America. Also we brook up at 4grade autumn. >> Also we broke up during the autumn of our fourth year.and I got the job after finishing the school.>> And got a job after finishing my studies. Nowadays, when I think about the my past time, it was a big mistake to meet her. >> Nowadays, when I think about the past, I realized it was a big mistake meeting her. After the accident, I never do same mistake to fell in love perfectly.>> After that, I never committed the same mistake - to love someone too much.

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