Homework (4.14)

2021-04-19 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

학생이 쓴 원문

Q. What kind of exciting activities do you want to try on weekends? A. I want to try to go camping. I haven\'t tried to do that because my children was too young to go with. It was very hard to sleep outside home with a baby. In addition, Public camping area was almost closed due to pandemic in last year. It is very expensive to buy all camping equipment and needs enough space in a house. so, I\'d like to try caravan camping at first. We can borrow camping car and all equipment there, We need to prepare only our food. I want to give my sun experience about sleeping ac ar. He loves cars. That\'s the important reason.

강사 첨삭

Hi Ji [이름]! Wow that sounds very exciting :) Can\'t wait to hear you stories when you try camping with your family :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. Soon!

-Teacher Elise

I want to try to go camping. 
>> I want to try camping.

I haven\'t tried to do that because my children was too young to go with.
>> I haven\'t tried to do that because my children were too young to go with.

It was very hard to sleep outside home with a baby. 
>>It was very hard to sleep away from you house with  a baby. 

In addition, Public camping area was almost closed due to pandemic in last year.
>>In addition, public camping area closed due to the pandemic since last year.

It is very expensive to buy all camping equipment and needs enough space in a house. 
>>It is very expensive to buy all camping equipment and needs.

so, I\'d like to try caravan camping at first. 
>> That\'s why I would like to try caravan camping first.

We can borrow camping car and all equipment there, We need to prepare only our food. 
>> We can borrow a camping car which comes with all the needed equipment. The only thing that we would need to prepare is food. 

I want to give my sun experience about sleeping car.
>> I want to give my son an experience in sleeping in a car. 

He loves cars. That\'s the important reason.
>> He loves cars and that\'s one of the main reasons why I want to try this.

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