Homework(4.16)
학생이 쓴 원문
What skill do you want to learn in the future and why?
- I\'d like to learn baking. It is good way to express my appreciation with small gift. Hand-made cookies or snack or bakes by myself could impress people. It could be not only good refreshments for kids but also healthy foods.
Could you give me a correction for my self introduction to prepare a job interview as below ?
\\\"I grew up in Pohang until finishing my high school, and then I moved to Seoul when I was 20, and took up degree in Multimidia communication engineering.
After I graduated from Seoul Women\\\'s university, I used to live in Toronto for 7 months to study English. While I lived there, I was interested in learning English.
So, after come to Korea, I joined semiconductor trading company to use English during my work. I have an experience over 5years for trading work. I hope there will be an opportunity to work with you.\\\"
강사 첨삭
Hello, Ji [이름]! It\'s nice to know that you are interested in baking to make people around you happy. Also, good luck on your job interview!
-Faith-
What skill do you want to learn in the future and why?>> CORRECT
- I\'d like to learn baking.
- I\'d like to learn baking.
>> CORRECT
OR The skill that I want to acquire in the future is baking.
It is good way to express my appreciation with small gift.
>> It is a good way to express my appreciation to others with small gifts.
Hand-made cookies or snack or bakes by myself could impress people.
>> Hand-made cookies or snacks that are baked by myself could impress people.
It could be not only good refreshments for kids but also healthy foods.
>> It could not only be good refreshments for kids but are also healthy foods.
Could you give me a correction for my self introduction to prepare a job interview as below ?
>> It could not only be good refreshments for kids but are also healthy foods.
Could you give me a correction for my self introduction to prepare a job interview as below ?
>> Could you give me a correction for my self introduction to prepare for a job interview as below?
\"I grew up in Pohang until finishing my high school, and then I moved to Seoul when I was 20, and took up degree in Multimidia communication engineering.
\"I grew up in Pohang until finishing my high school, and then I moved to Seoul when I was 20, and took up degree in Multimidia communication engineering.
>> \"I grew up in Pohang until I finished my high school, and then I moved to Seoul when I was 20, and took up Multimedia Communication Engineering.
After I graduated from Seoul Women\\\'s university, I used to live in Toronto for 7 months to study English.
After I graduated from Seoul Women\\\'s university, I used to live in Toronto for 7 months to study English.
>> After I graduated from Seoul Women\'s University, I went to Toronto and stayed there for seven months to study English.
While I lived there, I was interested in learning English.
>> CORRECT
So, after come to Korea, I joined semiconductor trading company to use English during my work.
So, after come to Korea, I joined semiconductor trading company to use English during my work.
>> So, when I came back to Korea, I joined a semiconductor trading company to use English during my work.
I have an experience over 5years for trading work.
>> I have worked there for five years.
I hope there will be an opportunity to work with you.\\\"
>> I hope I will be given an opportunity to work with you.\"
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