Homework#4
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HW#4 Is it better to love and lose or never to love?
Hi, joylin. Thank you for your advice. Recently, I want to speak English well. Because the speaking and english make me more wider sight in the world. I will do my best for studying English.
This is the answer to your question.
I think it is better to love in life.
First, love make miracle. This means that someone who love with their girlfriend or boyfriend is effor to be better person.
In other words, what is changing personality is really difficult. but love can do that.
Secondly, If many people do not have exprience loving someone, they can not love anyone including themselves.
lastly, there are many reasons that many people are afraid of losing someone who is loved. but, losing love make people learn many things like knowing their disadvanges and etc.
It also help them to grow up faster.
These are reasons why people should love someone
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Hi [이름]!
You\'re always welcome.
Yes, good practice makes perfect!
Every fluent English speakers have been through learning like you are now. They did it! And so, you can do it, too!
Anyway, I am moved with your ideas about the questions. I\'m thinking that you maybe had an experience of losing someone you love the most. Well, I had, so I relate well with it. Haha!
Here are my corrections.
I think it is better to love in life.
>> Correct!
First, love make miracle. This means that someone who love with their girlfriend or boyfriend is effor to be better person.
>> First, love makes miracle. This means that someone who\'s in love with his/her girlfriend or boyfriend is an effort to be a better person.
In other words, what is changing personality is really difficult. but love can do that.
>> In other words, changing personality is really difficult but love can do that.
Secondly, If many people do not have exprience loving someone, they can not love anyone including themselves.
>> Secondly, If many people do not have an experience loving someone, they can not love anyone including themselves.
lastly, there are many reasons that many people are afraid of losing someone who is loved. but, losing love make people learn many things like knowing their disadvanges and etc.
>> Lastly, there are many reasons that many people are afraid of losing someone whom they loved. But, losing love makes people learn many things like knowing its disadvantages and etc.
It also help them to grow up faster.
>> It also helps them to grow up faster.
These are reasons why people should love someone
>> These are the reasons why people should love someone.
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