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2014-01-07 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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How do you think human civilization will ultimately end? Wow. this topic is very sad. I don't know about future of human civilization. However I don't think it will ultimately end. Is there any method. isn't it? These day, environment pollution is very serious so we can't eat any food easily. Many people think fish is dangerous for radioactivity in Korea. Moreover, we have facing abnormal climate. It is very starnage that it's snowy in summer. Furthermore we heard heavy rainy and snow. I'm scared when I hear these news and I think about human civilization's future. In the Bible, refer to the end and we can live heavn finally. I'd like to believe this. On the other hand, we have to protect our Earth beautifully and clearly. I thinnk it's up to us.

강사 첨삭

Happy and cheerful Tuesday morning to you Ms. [Name]! 

Well, I totally agree that it\'s all up to us if we are going to save our world or not so that it will not end. 

I hope that the happenings that I am watching in the movies will not eventually happen to our planet. 

So every people should really help saving mother earth. 
Thanks for the nice essay! 

Great one! 


Always, 
Kathrine ^^


How do you think human civilization will ultimately end?


Wow. this topic is very sad.

>>  Wow. This topic is very sad. 

>> or; Wow, it\'s a very sad topic. 

I don\'t know about future of human civilization.

>>  I don\' t know the future of human civilization. 

However I don\'t think it will ultimately end.

>>  correct! 

Is there any method. isn\'t it?

>>  Is there any method? Isn\'t it? 

These day, environment pollution is very serious so we can\'t eat any food easily.

>>  These days, environment pollution is very serious so we can\'t eat any food easily. 

Many people think fish is dangerous for radioactivity in Korea.

>>  Many people think that eating a fish is dangerous because of the radioactivity in Korea. 

Moreover, we have facing abnormal climate.

>>  Moreover, we have been facing an abnormal climate. 

It is very starnage that it\'s snowy in summer.

>>  correct! (spelling correction-strange)

Furthermore we heard heavy rainy and snow.

>>   correct!

I\'m scared when I hear these news and I think about human civilization\'s future. 

>>  correct! 

In the Bible, refer to the end and we can live heavn finally.

>>   In the Bible, it refers to the end so we can finally live in heaven. 

I\'d like to believe this.

>>  correct! 

On the other hand, we have to protect our Earth beautifully and clearly.

>>  correct! 

I thinnk it\'s up to us.

>>  correct! (spelling correction-think)

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