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2014-02-03 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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How are you? I was little tired but I'm better. The topic is good. How do Koreans celebrate Lunar New Year (Seollal) differently from Chinese? I don't konw Chinese's Lunar New Year exactly but when I went to the China town in Shingarpore, it was very crowded. They bought foods and present. It looked like a festival. In Korea, we eat Deokguk that is soup. It makes by white rice cake like coin. We put in egg, beaf, laver and so on. We alos have a memorial service for ancestor. This is because we make a lot of foods like Jeons(pancake?), meats, fishes, vegetables and so on. We meet many family members for a long time. We can share our news. It is special. However it is not just good for women because household is alomst hers. Thesedays many men help women but it is not enough. First of all, most family gather in the husband's house. And then women go to their parents house. Actually it is different from door to door. See you on Monday.

강사 첨삭

Hi there again Ms. [Name]!

Well, that\'s really a big difference when it comes to Chinese New Year and Korean New year.

My country also celebrates Lunar New Year but only for one day.
We had a holiday on Friday actually.

But we do follow the Chinese New year.
It\'s quite different from Korean Seollal since I think Chinese New Year is like a festival.

With a lot of dancing dragons, foods, and festivities.

Really quite different.
But anyway, whatever the differences are, I am very sure that every Koreans and Chinese\'s is enjoying their New Year.

I hope to hear from you tomorrow.
See you!

Take care!


Always,
Kathrine ^^




How are you?

>> correct!

I was little tired but I\'m better.

>>  I was a little tired but I\'m better/good.

The topic is good.
>>  correct! 


 How do Koreans celebrate Lunar New Year (Seollal) differently from Chinese?
 
I don\'t konw Chinese\'s Lunar New Year exactly but when I went to the China town in Shingarpore, it was very crowded.

>>  I don\'t know exactly the Chinese Lunar New Year but when I went to China Town in Singapore, it was very crowded.

They bought foods and present.

>>  correct!

It looked like a festival.

>>  correct!

 In Korea, we eat Deokguk that is soup.

>>  In Korea, we are eating Deokguk which is a soup.

It makes by white rice cake like coin.

>>  It is made by white rice cake which looks like a coin.

We put in egg, beaf, laver and so on.

>>  We put some egg, beef, liver, and so on.

We alos have a memorial service for ancestor.

>>  We also have a memorial service for our ancestors.

This is because we make a lot of foods like Jeons(pancake?), meats, fishes, vegetables and so on.

>>  correct!

We meet many family members for a long time.

>>  correct!

We can share our news.

>>  correct!

It is special.

>>  correct!

However it is not just good for women because household is alomst hers.

>> However, it is not good for women because they mostly do the household chores on their own.

These days many men help women but it is not enough.

>>  correct!

>> or: These days, many men are helping the women but it is not enough.

First of all, most family gather in the husband\'s house.

>>  First of all, most family members gather in the husband\'s house.

And then women go to their parents house.

>>  correct!

Actually it is different from door to door.
>>  correct! 

>> or: Actually it is different from one case to another.
 See you on Monday.

>>  correct!  

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