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2014-02-11 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I'll go to Mars. It is because, that planet is very marvelous. Maybe, the aliens live in Mars. I want to contact them.And I'll be the richest man. Because, when I tell the story about alien, government may give the money.

강사 첨삭

Hello Tom!

Good Tuesday to you! It\'s a nice day for me, how about you?

You did a great job! You were able to compose great sentences.^^

Keep it up! Please tell me more about your ideas in class.

See you! Have a great night!

Teacher Nina

 

I\'ll go to Mars.

>> Correct!
It is because, that planet is very marvelous.

>> It is because the planet is marvelous.
Maybe, the aliens live in Mars.

>> Correct!

I want to contact them.

>> Did you mean: I want to have a contact with them.
>> OR:
I want to see them.

And I\'ll be the richest man.

>> Correct!
Because, when I tell the story about alien, government may give the money.

>> It is because if I tell the story about the aliens, the government might give me some money.

>> OR: It is because if I share the story about the aliens, I might receive some money.

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