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2014-02-13 · 첨삭 강사 Kristel

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I think family means a shelter that make them feel comfortable and be themselves. There may be things that tire you or make you feel frustrated outside your home. And you couldn't express how you feel straightly outside your home. We know that sometimes we have to hide our emotion, don't we? For example, you may meet a picky customer when you are doing your part time job which is really tiring but instead of showing how you feel you may deal the customer with kindness. And outside the house, you have other roles like a student or a teacher or a worker etc. But when you are at home, you can be just yourself. You don't need to hide you feelings or put more importance on other roles rather than being yourself. In addition, the most great thing is that there are ones that love you in your home so you could have warm, comfortable and stable feelings. Bye Krisrel;) Have a wonderful day;) I always appreciate your encouraging and positive comments.;) Thank you;)

강사 첨삭

Hello there [이름] my dear!! It made sense, really!!! I was impressed reading your material! Two thumbs up to your work, sweetie! Keep writing and enjoy sharing~~ Have a great day and see you! T.Kristel- I think family means a shelter that make them feel comfortable and be themselves. >> CORRECT!!There may be things that tire you or make you feel frustrated outside your home. >> CORRECT!!And you couldn\'t express how you feel straightly outside your home. We know that sometimes we have to hide our emotion, don\'t we? >> CORRECT!! (You can also say, directly) CORRECT!!For example, you may meet a picky customer when you are doing your part time job which is really tiring but instead of showing how you feel you may deal the customer with kindness. >> For example, you may meet a picky customer when you are doing your part time job which is really tiring but instead of showing how you feel you may deal with the customer with kindness.And outside the house, you have other roles like a student or a teacher or a worker etc. >> And outside the house, you have other roles like being a student, a teacher, a worker etc.But when you are at home, you can be just yourself. >> CORRECT!! You don\'t need to hide you feelings or put more importance on other roles rather than being yourself. >> CORRECT!!In addition, the most great thing is that there are ones that love you in your home so you could have warm, comfortable and stable feelings. >> In addition, the greatest thing is that there are ones that love you in your home so you could have warm, comfortable and stable feelings.Bye Krisrel;) Have a wonderful day;) >> CORRECT!! CORRECT!!I always appreciate your encouraging and positive comments.;) >> CORRECT!!Thank you;) >> CORRECT!!

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