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2014-02-27 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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What alcohol can you never drink again? Why did you say so? I have a memory about alcohol. We have to pass the test to go to the high school. There was celebration at 100 days from examinaton. Usually, we drank alcohol. This is because alcohol is Sul in Korea and Sul's meaning is 'without any trouble'. When I was middle school student, I was very pure. My best friend and me bought a bottle of alcohol and drink it at night in the my house. The alcohol was Macgeolri that is made by rice, traditional alcohol. The taste was bitter. We laughed big while drinking. Our action was strange and taste was unique. My parents never didn't know about that so our heart was beating fast. Alcohol is like magic because we can close each other while drinking. Sometime we can get rid of our stress. However we know there are dangerous elements such as car accident, violence and so on. So I think we have to control amount of alcohol and we'd like to just enjoy it in good mood.

강사 첨삭

Great morning to you Ms. [Name]!

Well, drinking alcohol with friends and people that you know is really enjoyable and as what you have said, it will bring you closer to each other.

And I do agree that it is not good also for our health and it will cause some accidents if we are drunk too much.

And I do hope that you are not drinking anymore. hahah.

Gone are the days. ^^

See you again tomorrow.

Thanks for today!


Always,
Kathrine ^^


What alcohol can you never drink again? Why did you say so?

I have a memory about alcohol.

>> I have a memory about drinking alcohol.

>> or: I remember the time that I drank alcohol.

We have to pass the test to go to the high school. 

>>  We have to pass the test to go to high school.

 There was celebration at 100 days from examinaton.

>>  There was a celebration for the 100 days from the examination.

Usually, we drank alcohol.

>>  We usually drink alcohol.

This is because alcohol is Sul in Korea and Sul\'s meaning is \'without any trouble\'.

>>  correct!

When I was middle school student, I was very pure.

>>  When I was a middle school student, I was so innocent.

My best friend and me bought a bottle of alcohol and drink it at night in the my house.

>>  correct!

The alcohol was Macgeolri that is made by rice, traditional alcohol.

>>  The alcohol was Macgeolri which is made from rice and it is the traditional alcohol.

The taste was bitter.

>>  correct!

We laughed big while drinking.

>> We laughed a lot while drinking.

Our action was strange and taste was unique.

>> Our actions were strange and the taste of the alcohol was unique.

My parents never didn\'t know about that so our heart was beating fast.

>>  My parents didn\'t know about it so our hearts were beating fast.

Alcohol is like magic because we can close each other while drinking.

>>  Alcohol is like a magic because we can be close to each other while drinking.

Sometime we can get rid of our stress.

>>  Sometimes, we can get rid of our stress.

However we know there are dangerous elements such as car accident, violence and so on.

>>  However, we know that there are dangerous elements such as car accidents, violence and so on.

So I think we have to control amount of alcohol and we\'d like to just enjoy it in good mood.

>>  So I think we have to control the amount of alcohol and we just like to enjoy it in a good mood.

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