Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Great morning to you Ms. [Name]!
Well, drinking alcohol with friends and people that you know is really enjoyable and as what you have said, it will bring you closer to each other.
And I do agree that it is not good also for our health and it will cause some accidents if we are drunk too much.
And I do hope that you are not drinking anymore. hahah.
Gone are the days. ^^
See you again tomorrow.
Thanks for today!
Always,
Kathrine ^^
What alcohol can you never drink again? Why did you say so?
I have a memory about alcohol.
>> I have a memory about drinking alcohol.
>> or: I remember the time that I drank alcohol.
We have to pass the test to go to the high school.
>> We have to pass the test to go to high school.
There was celebration at 100 days from examinaton.
>> There was a celebration for the 100 days from the examination.
Usually, we drank alcohol.
>> We usually drink alcohol.
This is because alcohol is Sul in Korea and Sul\'s meaning is \'without any trouble\'.
>> correct!
When I was middle school student, I was very pure.
>> When I was a middle school student, I was so innocent.
My best friend and me bought a bottle of alcohol and drink it at night in the my house.
>> correct!
The alcohol was Macgeolri that is made by rice, traditional alcohol.
>> The alcohol was Macgeolri which is made from rice and it is the traditional alcohol.
The taste was bitter.
>> correct!
We laughed big while drinking.
>> We laughed a lot while drinking.
Our action was strange and taste was unique.
>> Our actions were strange and the taste of the alcohol was unique.
My parents never didn\'t know about that so our heart was beating fast.
>> My parents didn\'t know about it so our hearts were beating fast.
Alcohol is like magic because we can close each other while drinking.
>> Alcohol is like a magic because we can be close to each other while drinking.
Sometime we can get rid of our stress.
>> Sometimes, we can get rid of our stress.
However we know there are dangerous elements such as car accident, violence and so on.
>> However, we know that there are dangerous elements such as car accidents, violence and so on.
So I think we have to control amount of alcohol and we\'d like to just enjoy it in good mood.
>> So I think we have to control the amount of alcohol and we just like to enjoy it in a good mood.
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