Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
If you were an inventor, what thing are you going to invent? or, If you were a scientist, what problem would you work on?
These days, the air is not clear due to fine dust. Doctor say we need to wear mask. However, mask is uncomfortable so I'd like to invent great mask. That is to be pass only fresh air. I think some inventor or scientist made it already but the price might be high. Actually I want to make it that price is low and quality is great. Furthermore I'd like to contribute for pure air to be inventor.
강사 첨삭
Hi there Ms. [Name]!
Great evening to you!
How was your day at work?
I hope that everything went well.
Well, I just came home from my graduate school.
It is quite a tiring day actually. ^^
Anyway, thanks for sharing your thoughts about our topic.
You have such a very good idea.
Thousands are actually dying because of the polluted air, especially in China but of course also in your country.
Babies are mostly affected.
And I am very sure that you don\'t want your future baby to be affected by this.
I hope that inventors and scientists will really invent a useful mask for protection against this fine dust.
See you then tomorrow.
Have a great evening and a great night.
See you!
Always,
Kathrine ^^
If you were an inventor, what thing are you going to invent? or, If you were a scientist, what problem would you work on?
These days, the air is not clear due to fine dust.
>> These days, the air is not clear due to the fine dust.
>> or: The air is not clean and safe these days because of the fine dust.
Doctor say we need to wear mask.
>> Doctors say that we need to wear a mask.
However, mask is uncomfortable so I\'d like to invent great mask.
>> However, the mask is uncomfortable so I\'d like to invent a great mask.
That is to be pass only fresh air.
>> That only the fresh air will pass through it.
I think some inventor or scientist made it already but the price might be high.
>> I think that some inventors or scientists have already ad eit but the price might be high.
Actually I want to make it that price is low and quality is great.
>> Actually, I want to make it and that the price is low and the quality is still great.
Furthermore I\'d like to contribute for pure air to be inventor.
>> Furthermore, I\'d like to contribute of having a pure/fresh air as an inventor.
Great evening to you!
How was your day at work?
I hope that everything went well.
Well, I just came home from my graduate school.
It is quite a tiring day actually. ^^
Anyway, thanks for sharing your thoughts about our topic.
You have such a very good idea.
Thousands are actually dying because of the polluted air, especially in China but of course also in your country.
Babies are mostly affected.
And I am very sure that you don\'t want your future baby to be affected by this.
I hope that inventors and scientists will really invent a useful mask for protection against this fine dust.
See you then tomorrow.
Have a great evening and a great night.
See you!
Always,
Kathrine ^^
If you were an inventor, what thing are you going to invent? or, If you were a scientist, what problem would you work on?
These days, the air is not clear due to fine dust.
>> These days, the air is not clear due to the fine dust.
>> or: The air is not clean and safe these days because of the fine dust.
Doctor say we need to wear mask.
>> Doctors say that we need to wear a mask.
However, mask is uncomfortable so I\'d like to invent great mask.
>> However, the mask is uncomfortable so I\'d like to invent a great mask.
That is to be pass only fresh air.
>> That only the fresh air will pass through it.
I think some inventor or scientist made it already but the price might be high.
>> I think that some inventors or scientists have already ad eit but the price might be high.
Actually I want to make it that price is low and quality is great.
>> Actually, I want to make it and that the price is low and the quality is still great.
Furthermore I\'d like to contribute for pure air to be inventor.
>> Furthermore, I\'d like to contribute of having a pure/fresh air as an inventor.
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