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2014-03-12 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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List three things you need, even though they have come less popular and why? At first, I need a baby who is healthy and lovely. Some couples don't want to have one because they think baby will be disturb their life. However, I think the one is present and pleasure in family. Second, I need a skill of work. Maybe whoever seem to want this. When I look around, I can see people who get a lot of talent. I envy them. Actually, I know "Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration." Third. I need a satisfaction. When I was young, I think it is unneedless. However, It is important because happiness is from satisfaction. Sometime it is enough in my heart but sometime it is exhausted. It is all not simple. Hahaha. Simply, I need a box of sweetpotato, cross-bag and hair pin. kkk

강사 첨삭

Great morning Ms. [Name]!
Happy Wednesday!

Times runs so fast!

Well, I am hoping and praying that you will really have a baby soon.

Having a baby in the family is a blessing and not a disturbance.

Maybe those couples who don\'t want to have a baby do not understand it.

Anyway, wish you luck on that.
See you later! ~_~


Always,
Kathrine ^^


List three things you need, even though they have come less popular and why?

At first, I need a baby who is healthy and lovely.

>> First, I need a baby who is healthy and lovely.

>> or: First, I need to have a healthy and lovely baby.

Some couples don\'t want to have one because they think baby will be disturb their life.

>> Some couples don\'t want to have one because they think baby will disturb their life.

However, I think the one is present and pleasure in family.
>> However, I think that having a baby is like a present and the baby will give pleasure to the family.
Second, I need a skill of work.

>> Second, I need to have a skill at work.

Maybe whoever seem to want this.

>> Maybe, may people seem to want to have this.

When I look around, I can see people who get a lot of talent.

>> When I am looking around, I can see many people who have a lot of talents.

 I envy them.

>> correct!

Actually, I know \"Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration.\"
>> Actually, I know that \"Success is 1% inspiration and 99% perspiration.\"
Third. I need a satisfaction.

>> Third, I need satisfaction.

When I was young, I think it is unneedless.

>> When I was young, I though it is unnecessary.

However, It is important because happiness is from satisfaction.

>> correct!

Sometime it is enough in my heart but sometime it is exhausted.
>> Sometimes, I feel in my heart that is enough but I still feel exhausted.
It is all not simple. Hahaha.

>> It is not at all simple. hahaha

Simply, I need a box of sweetpotato, cross-bag and hair pin. kkk

>> Simply, I need a box of sweetpotato, a cross-bag, and a hair pin. kkk

>>  or: I simply need a box of sweetpotato, a cross-bag,  and a hair pin. kkk

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