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"My lovely pets" I have lovely brothers.Even If they are not my real siblings whom my mom gave birth to, I love them very much.They are my salt water fishes.I always wanted to breed a salt water fish! My mother and father allowed me to breed salt water fishes when I was in third grade. It was during my winter vacation and I was so happy. Howervr,the information from books and newspapers didn't help me to know how to breed and administer food to them. I just imagine the fishes and corals with boast that swim gracefully with beautiful corals that they haven't experience in their life. My fish tank is special because I don't have to change the water. It is comfortable for me because I don't have to change it by myself. When it comes to cleaning the sea grass and some depurates,measuring the temperature and salinity, I have to do it by myself like in a common fish tank. The first fishes that I had are Clown fish,Tomato clown,Purple goby and Mandarine fish.

Hello there Tom! Thank you for sending this part of your speech tonight.I really admire you for always listening to my suggestions. With that kind of attitude, I am sure that you will win the contest! Keep it up! Please go over the corrections I provided for you below. I made some changes in order for your speech to be meaningful. See you on Monday! Enjoy your weekend! Take Care!Teacher Nina   \"My lovely pets\" >> CORRECT! I have lovely brothers. >> CORRECT! Even If they are not my real siblings whom my mom gave birth to, I love them very much. >> CORRECT! They are my salt water fishes. >> CORRECT! I always wanted to breed a salt water fish! >> CORRECT! My mother and father allowed me to breed salt water fishes when I was in third grade. >> CORRECT! >> OR: My parents allowed me to breed salt water fishes when I was in third grade. It was during my winter vacation and I was so happy. >> CORRECT! Howervr,the information from books and newspapers didn\'t help me to know how to breed and administer food to them. >> CORRECT! ( Spelling check: however ^^) I just imagine the fishes and corals with boast that swim gracefully with beautiful corals that they haven\'t experience in their life. >> CORRECT! My fish tank is special because I don\'t have to change the water. >> CORRECT! It is comfortable for me because I don\'t have to change it by myself. >> CORRECT! >> OR: It is comfortable for me because I don\'t have do it. ( Using the word change again leads to redundancy- repeating the same word in a sentence. ) When it comes to cleaning the sea grass and some depurates,measuring the temperature and salinity, I have to do it by myself like in a common fish tank. >> CORRECT! >> BETTER: I have to do these things such as cleaning the sea grasses and some depurates, also measuring the temperature and salinity of water which a person does in a common fish tank. The first fishes that I had are Clown fish,Tomato clown,Purple goby and Mandarine fish. >> CORRECT!