Homework.

2014-03-25 · 첨삭 강사 Winnie

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Hi Chelsea! Today, I can't concentrate in our class because i drank a lot of alcohol last night. I'm sorry for that. Korean's style wine is Soju, that is tasty not good. just like a tequila. --a Anyway, today my homework's topic is "What are the advantages or disadvantages of traditional and modern medicine?" Of course I think that modern medicine give us advantages are very various. One of the best advantage is that people can get a quick cure for they disease. And the other one is a surgical robotic that more sophiscated than people. But disadvantages of modern medicine is that cost. It require more money for modern technology, the people wihtout money deads. I regret the situaions. Today I will finish now. I will concentrated our class. I promiss you ! See you tomorrow ~ bye bye.

강사 첨삭

Hi!

How are you doing today? I hope that you are already feeling well.

You made me smile because even if you were drunk last night,

you still wrote this composition. I appreciate it.

Thank you so much.

Enjoy the rest of the day. Have a good and sound sleep.

See you again tomorrow.

Teacher Chelsea

 

Hi Chelsea!

Today, I can\'t concentrate in our class because i drank a lot of alcohol last night. I\'m sorry for that.

>> Today, I can\'t concentrate on our class because I drank a lot of alcohol last night. I\'m sorry about that.

>> OR: Today, I can\'t concentrate on our class because I was drunk last night. I\'m sorry about that.
Korean\'s style wine is Soju, that is tasty not good. just like a tequila. --a

>> DID YOU MEAN THAT: Korean\'s style wine is Soju which is tasty but its not good just like tequila.
Anyway, today my homework\'s topic is \"What are the advantages or disadvantages of traditional and modern medicine?\"

>> BETTER: Anyway, my homework today is all about the advantages or disadvantages of traditional and modern medicine, am I correct?
Of course I think that modern medicine give us advantages are very various.

>> I think modern medicine gives us a lot of advantages.

>> OR: I think modern medicine gives us different or various advantages.
One of the best advantage is that people can get a quick cure for they disease.

>> One of the best advantages of modern medicine is that ill people can be cured quickly.

>> OR: One of the best advantages of modern medicine is that people can get quick cure if they are sick.
And the other one is a surgical robotic that more sophiscated than people.

>> And the other one is a surgical robot which is more sophisticated than a human being.
But disadvantages of modern medicine is that cost.

>> But the disadvantage of modern medicine is the cost.

>> OR: But the disadvantage of modern medicine is that it is very costly.
It require more money for modern technology, the people wihtout money deads.

>> It requires more money for modern technology, so people without money die.

>> OR: Modern technology requires more money so people who can not afford it die.
I regret the situaions.

>> I regret the situation.

>> OR: I regret these situations.
Today I will finish now.

>> Today, I will finish it.

>> OR: I will finish it now.
I will concentrated our class. I promiss you !

>> I will concentrate on our class. I promise you!

>> OR: I promise to concentrate on our class.

 
See you tomorrow ~ bye bye. 

>> See you tomorrow. Good bye.







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