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2014-03-31 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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Tell something about a person you would like to meet some day and why. Well. I can't think easily about that. Um.. I'd like to meet my first lover. Hahaha. On one fine spring day, I want to meet him. I know he lives in Seoul with pretty woman and cute sun. We met about twenty years ago. We were high school student and we had meet by ten years ago. My high school was girl's high school but the club was same with him. He bacame a lawyer that was his dream. I wonder how he is living now. kkk. I think he was just friend because my friends said it was not love but friendship. We didn't have special date. We just exchanged e-mai. we had meet, watched movie and ate dinner three or four times. Therefore we can talk in the day of our youth with a smile. Can I meet him by chance? hahaha.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [Name]!

Great Monday to you.
It is nice to hear your energetic voice today.
Well, your story made me smile.
I hope you can do that one day.
Of course, without any malice since the two of you are already married and both of you have a happy life now.

So both of you can just reminisce the past. kkkk
I am imagining now.
Seems like a movie. haha.

Anyway, thanks for sharing this one.
I enjoyed reading.


Always,
Kathrine ^^


Tell something about a person you would like to meet some day and why.

Well. I can\'t think easily about that.

>>  Well, I can\'t think easily about it.

Um.. I\'d like to meet my first lover. Hahaha.

>>  correct!

On one fine spring day, I want to meet him.

>> correct!
>> or: On a fine spring day, I want to meet him.

 I know he lives in Seoul with pretty woman and cute sun.

>>  I know that he lives in Seoul with a pretty woman and a cut son.

>> or: I know that he is living in Seoul with a pretty wife and a cut son.

We met about twenty years ago.

>>  We met twenty years ago.

We were high school student and we had meet by ten years ago.

>>  We were high school students and we met 10 years ago.

My high school was girl\'s high school but the club was same with him.

>>  My high school was a girl\'s high school but we are in the same club.

>> or: My high school was a girl\'s high school but I was in the same club with him.

He bacame a lawyer that was his dream.

>> He became a lawyer as it was his dream.

I wonder how he is living now. kkk.

>>  correct!

I think he was just friend because my friends said it was not love but friendship.

>>  correct!

We didn\'t have special date.

>>  We didn\'t have a special date.

We just exchanged e-mai.

>>  We just exchanged e-mails.

we had meet, watched movie and ate dinner three or four times.

>>  When we met, we just watched a movie, and ate dinner for 3 or 4 times.

Therefore we can talk in the day of our youth with a smile.

>>  Therefore, we can talk for a day  about the old times with a  smile.

Can I meet him by chance? hahaha.

>>  correct!

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