homework!
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ESSAY: Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, are such relationships good? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
- In my opinion, this kind of relationship is very good.
As a person who is raising the puppy, i also treat my puppy as a family member.
After she came to my home, she belonged our family.
Althogh she is very little creature, like person, she also can feel some emotions, can feel sick, pain, can bear young, have mother's affection, and she likes receiving loves.
She can feel everyting and she can do anything that person do.
So, we should feel responsibility for her and respect her as a special memeber in my family.
As people raise the puppy and treat him/her as one of the members of family, they can be taught how to interact with animal and can be more warm-hearted people.
강사 첨삭
Hi there!
Thank you for expressing your opinion and ideas about the topic.
I am grateful that through this composition, I have learned that you have a pet.
And I think you love animals, right?
Anyway, let\'s talk more later. See you!
~T. Jessie~
ESSAY: Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, are such relationships good? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. In my opinion, this kind of relationship is very good.
>> Correct!As a person who is raising the puppy, i also treat my puppy as a family member.
>> As a person who is raising a puppy, I also treat my puppy as a family member.
OR>> As a person who is raising a puppy, I also treat my puppy as a member of my family.After she came to my home, she belonged our family.
>> When she came to my home, she belongs to our family.Althogh she is very little creature, like person, she also can feel some emotions, can feel sick, pain, can bear young, have mother\'s affection, and she likes receiving loves.
>> Although she is a very little creature, like people, she can also feel some emotions, feel sick, pain, can bear a young, have a mother\'s affection, and she likes to be loved.She can feel everyting and she can do anything that person do.
>> She can feel everything and she can do anything that a person does.So, we should feel responsibility for her and respect her as a special memeber in my family.
>> So, we should be responsible with her and respect her as a special member of my family.As people raise the puppy and treat him/her as one of the members of family, they can be taught how to interact with animal and can be more warm-hearted people.
>> As people raise a puppy and treat him/her as one of the members of their families, they can be taught how to interact with the animal and can be more warm-hearted people.
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