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2014-04-01 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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They are from an aquarium that was shipped from Florida. So, the fishes are limited. So, I will breed them as much as possible. I always talk to my fishes and say, "Hello" And then, Ihave a peace of mind. This trait will help me to become a Bilogist. It is because a Biologist should think and love all living things. I want to have a big fish tank, breed a lot of corals and fishes when I grow older. So, I won't make a mistake in order for them to die because I don't know a lot of things about it. Thank you for listening to my speech.

강사 첨삭

Hi there!

How are you doing today?

Thank you so much for taking your time to post your composition.

Thank you also for expressing your ideas and opinion about this topic and I really agree with your answers.

I made some corrections and hope that I was able to meet your points.

See you then tomorrow and have a great day ahead of you!

Teacher Nina^^


They are from an aquarium that was shipped from Florida.

>> Correct!
So, the fishes are limited.

>> Correct!

So, I will breed them as much as possible.

>> In this case, I will breed them as much as possible.

I always talk to my fishes and say, \"Hello\" And then, Ihave a peace of mind.

>> I always talk to my fishes. I say, \"Hello\" and then, I have peace of mind.
This trait will help me to become a Bilogist.

>> This trait will help me to become a Biologist.
It is because a Biologist should think and love all living things.
>> It is because a biologist should think and love all living things.
I want to have a big fish tank, breed a lot of corals and fishes when I grow older.

>> I want to have a big fish tank, where I will be able breed a lot of corals and fishes when I grow older.

So, I won\'t make a mistake in order for them to die because I don\'t know a lot of things about it.

>> So, I won\'t make a mistake that would cause them to die because I don\'t know a lot of things about them.
Thank you for listening to my speech.

>> Correct!

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