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2014-04-02 · 첨삭 강사 ali

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Hi Chelsea, After lunch, I'm really so sleepy now. I tried to several manner but I'm still sleepy. Anyway today's topic is "why do people immigrate to another country?" I think usually people that doing immigrate are dissatisfied with their life. Usually a lot of people want a many salary more than currently receving salary, and want to more rest in their life. These a some of people look around another country that satisfying they selves. Or some of people just want to liveing another country in their life. Anyway I don't want to immigrated. kkk Have a nice day, and see you tomorrow. Bye.

강사 첨삭

Hi there!

Happy first day of the month!

How was your day?

It\'s quite a pleasure to check your work again!

You are doing a great job in writing you ideas and opinions! Keep that up:)

In this life, there are things we can\'t touch, we can\'t see, but they are of the same importance as to the visible and tangible ones. Spread the spirit of love to the people around you and you\'ll see they will do the same to you in return. Anyway, thank you so much for sending in your homework today. I really appreciate it.

See you in class tomorrow :)

Teacher Chelsea ^^

 

Hi Chelsea,

>> CORRECT =)
After lunch, I\'m really so sleepy now.

>> I just had my lunch and I\'m so sleepy now.
I tried to several manner but I\'m still sleepy.
>> I tried several ways to be awake but I\'m still sleepy.
Anyway today\'s topic is \"why do people immigrate to another country?\"
>> CORRECT =) Be mindful with your proper capitalization.
I think usually people that doing immigrate are dissatisfied with their life.
>> I think people who immigrated to another country are those people who are not satisfied with their lives.
Usually a lot of people want a many salary more than currently receving salary, and want to more rest in their life.
>> Usually a lot of people want a bigger salary than their usual salary.
These a some of people look around another country that satisfying they selves.
>> There are some people who travel to different countries to satisfy themselves.
Or some of people just want to liveing another country in their life.
>> Or some people just want to live in another country for the rest of their lives.
Anyway I don\'t want to immigrated. kkk
>> Anyway, I don\'t want to immigrate.

>> OR: Anyway, I don\'t want to live in another country.
Have a nice day, and see you tomorrow. Bye.

>> Have a nice day and see you tomorrow. Bye.

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