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2014-04-02 · 첨삭 강사 Becca

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hello teacher. wonderful spring day~!! Have you enjoied wonderful weather? and bloomed flowers? I really enjoy these wonderful weather. today's homework There are many transportation in the world. and we use that everyday. In my opinion the ariplanes make a evoulution in the wolrd. there are some reasons. First is we can travel the another conuntry more fast than ever. It make us go to abroad more easily. so we can enjoy the a lot of things. second, some kinds of airplane such as jet can use the weapon. and it's really tremandous weapon in the war. third, we can fly the sky. it is really big meaning to our life. we don't have wings. but we dream and want to fly high. the airplane is kind of symbol of mankind imagination. so I think airplane is most effective transportation our life

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Hello Mr. [Name]!   Thank you for sending in your homework. I also think that airplane is a revolutionary invention. But too bad, I have never been in an airplane kkkk And we don\'t experience Spring as well. I will tell you more in class. hihi   See you! ~Teacher Becca~ here are some corrections:   hello teacher. >> Hello teacher! wonderful spring day~!!>> What a wonderful Spring day! >> It\'s a wonderful Spring day!Have you enjoied wonderful weather? and bloomed flowers?>> Are you enjoying the wonderful weather and the blooming flowers?I really enjoy these wonderful weather.>> I really enjoy this weather. >> I find this wondeful weather really enjoyable.today\'s homework >> correct :) >> OR: Answers for today\'s homework:There are many transportation in the world. and we use that everyday. >> There are many types of transportation int he world that we use everyday.In my opinion the ariplanes make a evoulution in the wolrd. >> In my opinion, airplanes made a great evolution in the world.there are some reasons.>> Here are some reasons why.First is we can travel the another conuntry more fast than ever. >> First is that we can travel from one country to another faster than ever. It make us go to abroad more easily. >> It makes travelling easier. so we can enjoy the a lot of things.>> So we can enjoy doing a lot of things.second, some kinds of airplane such as jet can use the weapon. >> Secondly, some kinds of aircrafts can be used as a weapon, such as jets. and it\'s really tremandous weapon in the war.>> And I think it is a really tremendous weapon for wars.third, we can fly the sky. >> And the third is that we can fly in the sky. it is really big meaning to our life. >> It has a really big meaning in our lives. we don\'t have wings. but we dream and want to fly high. >> We don\'t have wings, but most of us dream of flying. the airplane is kind of symbol of mankind imagination. >> The airplane symbolizes the wide imagination of mankind.so I think airplane is most effective transportation our life >> Therefore, I think the airplane is the most effective type of transporation ever to be invented.

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